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[Riesa]

Recline side by side
stupored by sun and the pure
haze of laziness

[Pensive]

Haze of laziness
Does not let me work at all
I am feeling dead.

Hi Toni! :)

[Shalot]

I am feeling dead
Void of frenzied lights dripping
Musical color

[toni]

Musical color
Paralyzes crumpled fears
Midnight sun is up

[dramasnot6]

Oh, okay. Please don't get mad. I know you are a Haiku Great, I've read your entries and Toni likes you a lot.

I "corrected" your entry because I "thought" that it was wrong and so we can't continue doing it if it remains that way. I "just thought" that it was wrong, alright? Please don't get mad.

I've listened to the word and it was pronounced like "TOH-wards" when I first heard it but "tords" when I thought about the word contains just 1 syllable. And I live in Asia so there are pronunciation differences in this part of the world as compared in the West. But now I realized that IT is "TAWRDS".

Right. I hope everything is settled and I hope you are not mad at me. The correcting thing is second nature to me because I'm the eldest in the family and my siblings are recipients of it.

Haiku entry:

Then trip, crawl towards graves.
Begging for a man's pity
For her little err.

why did u ignore my haiku?
thanks again for saving the last line robinhood, defender of the poor and haiku victims?:D

Musical color
Flutes weave with players sweet breath
Talentless spider

[dramasnot6]

oh im so sorry toni, didnt know u posted one for musical color already....

[dramasnot6]

Midnight sun is up
Movements clandestine and trapped
Hail to demons will

[toni]

oh im so sorry toni, didnt know u posted one for musical color already....

It is oki, dramasnot:lol: :lol: ;) :p :D :) (I love emoticons)

Hail to demons will
The sky will tumble at Fall
Stings of human sin..

[dramasnot6]

Stings of human sin
Vodka embeds every sound
Blonde hair pokes through sheets

[Virgil]

Well, what should we do about it? Maybe we should take a poll! Have people vote as to whether or not my haiku is valid - see if there is anybody out there who would be willing to try to use it, assuming that it can be pronounced with just one syllable?

Frankly I think the author has descretion on how he wants to pronounce it. I like the flexibility.

[Virgil]

Blonde hair pokes through sheets
After a night of rolling fun.
My first and only love.

[dramasnot6]

aww that last line was touching virgil

My first and only love
She melts into my fingers
Luscious chocolate

[Laindessiel]

why did u ignore my haiku?


No Dramasnot, I didn't. You probably posted already while I was still typing. I don't ignore anyone, it makes them feel bad. And when someone feels bad, I blame myself. :(

[dramasnot6]

ah i understand.its ok, dont blame yourself. blame technology:p

[Virgil]

aww that last line was touching virgil

My first and only love
She melts into my fingers
Luscious chocolate

Thanks!

Luscious chocolate
made my hips explode wide
and my belly hang

[dramasnot6]

lol

And my belly hang
Endless rolls fight gravity
Pillsbury Doughboy

[Virgil]

Pillsbury Doughboy
Is what the guys call me now.
Poke a finger in.

[Il Penseroso]

Poke a finger in,
explore sensuality
but linger no more.

[toni]

But linger no more
Flee to the woods if you wish
Before the night falls

Welcome to the forum, Il Penseroso!:wave:
Hope you have a great time! :lol:

[Il Penseroso]

Thanks toni! I'm sure I will.

Before the night falls,
shadows caress your lids,
mind the calming dusk.

[dramasnot6]

hi there Il Penseroso! welcome:D
Before the night falls
Creatures sense their soon demise
Flee into branches

gah...i am terrible at haikus today:(

[dramasnot6]

I DID IT AGAIN!!!! gah!! sorry Il Penseroso!!!!
everyone ignore my last post

[toni]

everyone ignore my last post

No, i won't ignore it. it is not very bad.. :lol: Look at me, I'm always terrible at haikus..

Watch me:

Flee into branches
My tears melted with the leaves
Waiting for The End

[Il Penseroso]

Ahh, I got skipped. Oh well, easily fixed.

Waiting for the end
of day's deflated exit,
mind the calming dusk.

[Pensive]

Mind the calming dusk
forces me to love her eyes
and all her style.

[Virgil]

And all her style
is working into my blood.
She shakes her hips smooth.

[RobinHood3000]

She shakes her hips smooth,
Moving to sensuous beat
Salsa is our love

[Laindessiel]

Ah..

Salsa is our love
Curious beating of the hearts
Swaying in spotlight.

Sorry. No good.

[dramasnot6]

Swaying in spotlight
Lighted blessings flicker fast
Intoxicated

[Virgil]

Intoxicated
I stumble across the floor.
Honey, please hold me.

[RobinHood3000]

Honey, please hold me,
The cold rends the heat from me
Love, I need you so.

[Riesa]

Love, I need you so
you clack me like hot trainwheels
we're rushing our doom

[Virgil]

We're rushing our doom
By having frequent birthdays.
Please make them stop now.

[Il Penseroso]

Please make them stop now,
and by artist's grand style
make the world of ice.

[dramasnot6]

Make the world of ice
Shave the icecubes swallowing
The warmth of my mouth

[Il Penseroso]

The warmth of my mouth
is by your breath fanned, embers
heated by reply.

[Janine]

Silence screams within me
Your ears deafened by the sound
Our book closes forever.



Virgil - can't stop those birthdays!!!:D

[Virgil]

Not bad Janine, but I think you got six syllables in that last line. I'll modify it.

Book closes forever,
life ends with a small whimper.
Sun goes by again.

[Il Penseroso]

D'oh, I got skipped again.

Sun goes by again
and glowing souls glister more,
heated by reply.

[Riesa]

heated by reply
pressure to hit submit, poor
Il Penseroso

[Virgil]

D'oh, I got skipped again.

Sun goes by again
and glowing souls glister more,
heated by reply.

Wow, that is an excellent one. :thumbs_up

Il penseroso,
let's meet in Florence by the
ponte vecchio.
http://www.longpassages.org/images/Florence%20Ponte%20Vecchio%20aerial%20view.jpg

[Il Penseroso]

Ponte veccio,
the old bridge in Italy,
would be like a dream.

[Riesa]

would be like a dream,
like walking on arias
drinking Chianti

[Virgil]

Drinking Chianti
with Italian bread and cheese,
Wild mushrooms in oil.

[Riesa]

wild mushrooms in oil
partying like crazy with
sweet red potatoes

[Il Penseroso]

Not a good effort anyway. I was rushed.

[Virgil]

wild mushrooms in oil
partying like crazy with
sweet red potatoes

:lol:

Sweet red potatoes
Boiled with corned beef and cabbage
with spicy mustard.

[Riesa]

;)

with spicy mustard
eggroll hors'doevers sing a hot
tempting melody

[Il Penseroso]

Hmmm, I'm going to get some food.

Tempting melody
played upon an ancient lute
wittles the hours.

[Riesa]

Chinese or Italian?

wittles the hours
to diminutive specks like
sunbeam captured dust

[Il Penseroso]

Neither. Boxed mac-n-cheese, with hot sauce.

Sunbeam captured dust
sinks and rises by currents
touched only by air.

[Riesa]

ick. :lol: I had a gardenburger with jalapenos.

touched only by air
the boy in his bubble
reflects in silence

[Il Penseroso]

I'm in college, so I make do with lots of cheap grosseries.

Reflects in silence
the rugged star of westerns,
all hands with a gun.

[Riesa]

My favorite college food was top ramen with tuna and an egg, saturated with Rooster chili-garlic sauce. I've had my share of gross groceries.

all hands with a gun
the wicked wind's a blowin
meet sundown at Ike's.

[Il Penseroso]

That doesn't sound so gross.

Meet sundown at Ike's
the dropping day fills each bowl
with mystery chow.

[dramasnot6]

The warmth of my mouth
is by your breath fanned, embers
heated by reply.

That was really really good, congrats!! Im becoming a big fan of your haikus


With mystery chow
Cerebral cows graze roughly
Teeth ache from thinking

[Janine]

Not bad Janine, but I think you got six syllables in that last line. I'll modify it.

Book closes forever,
life ends with a small whimper.
Sun goes by again.

Gee, quite a modification....

Glad I am not as overly sensitive about my lame attempt to write, as I am about my artwork.

I'd call that a total rewrite!

[Janine]

Virgil, how many syllables should it have? I can rewrite it. I don't really know the technical rules of H. It was really from a longer poem I wrote - modified it quickly for this post.

[Janine]

my new lame attempt:

Silence screams within me
Your ears deafened by the sound
Pages close forever.

[Janine]

beyond then and here
now gone to distance near
far beyond imaginings

[Janine]

this is fun but think I am pretty bad at it!

[dramasnot6]

beyond then and here
now gone to distance near
far beyond imaginings

you skipped my haiku, its a continuation. but im glad youre getting the hang of it!
here, ill repost mine
With mystery chow
Cerebral cows graze roughly
Teeth ache from thinking

oh and haiku rules go
5 syllables
7
then 5 again
and in this forum you begin with the last persons line
like with mine your first line will be Teeth ache from thinking

and the next person will start with your last line

Feel free to ask questions if youre still confused! And welcome!

[OZEED]

Teeth ache from thinking
Back ache from loving to hard
Euphoric welts show

heya Janine, no worries Haiku took me a while to learn as well. You'll soon get the hang of it.
Don't forget the 5, 7, 5 syllabels

[toni]

Euphoric welts show
I will wait here Like A Stone
Blind dreaming turned snow

[dramasnot6]

Blind dreaming turned snow
Flecks of cream dot hooded lids
Waking and melting

[Whangdoodle]

Waking and melting
eye of curiosity
view beyond the wall

[toni]

View beyond the wall
Black hearts weep like crawling stones
Death will march itself

[Pensive]

Death will march itself
will happily tread towards us
with importance

[toni]

Nice irony, dear Pensy..

Full of happiness
Whenever you see his face
Tides will swallow me

[Riesa]

tides will swallow me
as I paint the commonplace
with importance (since Pensive's got skipped)

[Ubiquitous Prat]

with importance (since Pensive's got skipped)
Loves not important
I drown myslef in the bath

[Janine]

I drown myself in the bath
Deceptions long past
Murderous time stalks

[Virgil]

I drown myself in the bath
Deceptions long past
Murderous time stalks

Getting better Janine. I like that last line.

Murderous time stalks
The dark streets of Manhattan.
How will you save him?

[Il Penseroso]

Thanks dramasnot.

I've done this sort of thing on another forum, so I have lots of practice.

How will you save him
who wilts by helping fingers,
a stubborn flower?

[Riesa]

a stubborn flower
petals of sinewy tone
and trampoline bounce

[Janine]

Getting better Janine. I like that last line.

Murderous time stalks
The dark streets of Manhattan.
How will you save him?

Thanks - maybe practice helps. That last line made a great first one. I like yours. Think I would like the "the" to be like "dank dark streets...something more rank would be better. Gee, now I am giving advice and I am still pretty lame in writing them myself! sorry :blush:

[Janine]

and trampoline bounce
balloons bursting in thin air
Circus comes to town!

[Virgil]

and trampoline bounce
balloons bursting in thin air
Circus comes to town!

Excellent!!!:thumbs_up

Circus comes to town
And Boy decides to run off.
Perfect cannon ball.

[dramasnot6]

Yay! Go Janine!!
Perfect cannon ball
Ships staring with thirsty gore
Pirates Tete a Tete

[Janine]

Pirates Tete a Tete
Swords sharpened gnawing sharks teeth
Fast fury begins

[Janine]

did I spell knawing wrong?

[Janine]

knawling? ....whoops! :blush:

[Riesa]

gnawing. cool haiku, Janine!

fast fury begins
Christmas comes but once a year,
Consumerism.

[dramasnot6]

haha, love your take on that one riesa!oh and i just discovered your cinquain thread and am having lots of fun with that.

Consumerism
Mosaic of screens pressure
Poor mans addiction

[Virgil]

Poor man's addiction
is a snowy football game.
Touchdown is needed.

[Janine]

I love Riesa's haiku - just the way I am feeling right now...like Christmas....help! Consumerism, like a lurking wolf, invades all the stores!!! Thanks - did you really like my haiku? I did not think it made sense. I just changed the word "gnawing" - is that fair to do in the rules?
dramasnot6 I loved yours, too! Just got back from a store, so I can relate. The mosiac gave me a headache! Virgil - yours was so guyish. Is that a word?.... but I liked it. Not sure I can touch that last line but will try one anyway.

Touchdown is needed
All tension is magnified
Snowflakes on the hide

[Virgil]

Yes, I liked it. Why would I say so if I didn't. I think you've got the hang of it now.

Snowflakes on the hide
Snout sinks into the snowbank.
Puppies love fresh snow.

[Petrarch's Love]

Puppies love fresh snow.
Where has my little dog gone?
Into a white drift.

[brainstrain]

dogs are amazing
I love all of them always
golden retriever!

[brainstrain]

The wind I believe
is blowing towards the sea
from here away home

hm...last line doesn't quite make sense

[brainstrain]

Imagination
is my life blood and my soul
Oh, if i was free

[Janine]

Virgil - your haiku was so cute....then P followed with a sweet one, too. I went ....ahhh....
Virgil - no silly wolf, I was speaking to Riesa. I loved her "consumerism" Haiku. She like my haiku, she said.
Yes, I am having fun now and think I have the swing of it.

Into a white drift
The silver dove slowly swooned
A statue make white

[Janine]

Ops, someone broke the chain? I am still on "Into a white drift". We must have posted same time. What now?

[brainstrain]

I think i'm not too shabby at this "haiku"
please tell if i'm doing them wrong =D

one last poem...

To sleep i must fall
Mom's shrieks do affirm my thought
I bid you adieu

ok, there is no way i spelled adiue right =P

[Janine]

brainstorm, you did what I did in the beginning. You have to pick up the last line from last Haiku to start the new one you write. I just got the gist of it, too.

[brainstrain]

theres a chain? woops

my first time on the forums in 6 months, sorry lol

i'll check next time. you can continue with snow drift if u like, just ignore my haiku completley

[Janine]

They actually were very lovely haiku's. But the game is as I described in post above. I like the way you write. Stay in - it is so much fun!

[Janine]

stay in - it is fun!! I just wrote you a message and it did not post...wait I will rewrite it.

[Janine]

It just posted - sorry....just slow I suppose....

[Petrarch's Love]

If I'm tracking this right I think I'm following Janine:

A statue made white
With the gentle falling ash
Pompeii life now stilled.

[Janine]

Lovley P, as always. I particularly like this one though.

Pompeii life now stilled
Ashen walls and earthly time
still as gentle rain

[Janine]

Still as gentle rain
they await the dawn of fear
army passing by

PS: P - I was referring to your poem and not mine last time...sounded confusing...last sentence.

[Petrarch's Love]

Thanks Janine (I got it ;)). I like yours too.

Army passing by
Beautiful young men passing
Away far from home.

[Laindessiel]

Away, far from home
Is where his two feet takes him.
Don't know where to go.

[Janine]

Don't know where to go
Now that I have gone this far
Endless possibilities

[Laindessiel]

Endless possibilities
Endless musical passion
Endless dreams and hopes

Hey Shougrace, I'm being a good girl...

[Janine]

Endless dreams and hopes
Thwarted now in memory
Trapped beyond time alone

[dramasnot6]

Endless dreams and hopes
Aspirations of fooled youth
Crushed with middle age

[Laindessiel]

Uh, whom shall I follow?

[dramasnot6]

haha, my mom read my last one and said, with a very grim face, "was i the inspiration?"

[dramasnot6]

Oh, so sorry Janine and Laind!

[Janine]

Oh, so sorry Janine and Laind!

Well, I think you messed up - you used my first line and not my last line. I will go from here using your last line since I am middle-aged

Crushed with middle age
She bend to her endless woe
Alone and forlorn

[dramasnot6]

oh, no i didnt accidentally use your first line. we must have been creating our haikus simultaneously, and i posted a couple minutes later. i do that fairly often...i probably take way too much time writing one haiku that i dont press refresh to see if anyone has already written for that one. But thanks for keeping mine!!
Beautfil haiku by the way

[dramasnot6]

Alone and forlorn
Left to scream at concrete walls
Feelings like a leech

[Janine]

Thanks for the compliment, and BTW I love your Avatar. I still can't decide on one. I think that has happened to me before on other threads - posting same time as someone else. I try to do the haiku spontaneously but I am slow too.

Feelings like a leech
I cling to the stem
Life circles round me

[Janine]

Nite all ...yawn.....fad i n g a w a y

[OZEED]

Thanks for the compliment, and BTW I love your Avatar. I still can't decide on one. I think that has happened to me before on other threads - posting same time as someone else. I try to do the haiku spontaneously but I am slow too.

Feelings like a leech
I cling to the stem
Life circles around me

correct me if I'm wrong, but I do think that last line is 6 syllabels.
Anyway rock on

Life circles around me
Labeled ego speaks loudly
Thats so last season!

[dramasnot6]

yea, it is 6. ah well, we all had messy syllables as begginers.
Thats so last season!
Shopaholic clarifies
But could i care less?
hehe...a felt like making one a bit blunt and unsophisticated for once

[ShoutGrace]

Hey Shougrace, I'm being a good girl...

Yes indeed you are. :thumbs_up I'm so very proud. ;) :p Maybe a good way to do it would be just to copy and paste the instructions found on the first post in this thread?



But could I care less?
Not even if my friend was
Tickling my rib cage.

[toni]

Hey ShoutGrace, you're here! :wave: Hello!:)

Tickling my rib cage
To force humour out of me
Defy gravity

___
sorry, I am really a Haiku Failure Personified but I wanna say hello to ShoutGrace..:)

[ShoutGrace]

Hey ShoutGrace, you're here! :wave: Hello!:)

Tickling my rib cage
To force humour out of me
Defy gravity

___
sorry, I am really a Haiku Failure Personified but I wanna say hello to ShoutGrace..:)


"The only bad haiku is the one not written." ;) :D How are you toni?


Defy gravity
Lets get these space suits on and
Have some weightless sex.

[toni]

I am fine, now that I saw me fwend.:D

Have some wightless sex
Some bottled wine and crupmets
Time will transport us

__
Question! ShoutGrace's age is a mystery..
If you don't mind me asking,
Are you 20-ish 30-ish 40-ish or 50-ish?

[ShoutGrace]

It's not that I don't mind your asking, it's just that I don't like to think of myself as an "ish." :D



Time will transport us
Back to the dissolution
Of our former love.

[toni]

Of our former love
So tragic I remember
spitting on dark holes

-----
LOL.
Okay, Im gonna ask again, are you in your twenties, thirties fourties or fifties?

____

Your haikus are soo Romantic, you know..:)

[ShoutGrace]

Well, I try my best :) . . . I don't want to be tricky or anything, but I'm sure you can get a gist of my age from reading posts of mine. Maybe someday I'll tell you in a PM.


Spitting on dark holes
Watching the sun set over
The hulking sand dunes.

[toni]

Someday? I wanna know now!:D Pm me!

The hulking sand dunes
I tread over nameless trees
Wishing you'd be here..

[ShoutGrace]

:D

Wishing you'd be here
Instead I find a lot of
Empty time and space.

[toni]

Awww..:blush:

Empty time and space
I'll stumble, bleed just for you
I'll trade yesterday

___
I am greatly inspired and influenced by shoutgrace's romanticism.:D

[ShoutGrace]

Awww..:blush:

Empty time and space
I'll stumble, bleed just for you
I'll trade yesterday

___
I am greatly inspired and influenced by shoutgrace's romanticism.:D


I think that you are the kindest haiku'er ever. ;)


I'll trade yesterday
For a shot at what I think
We could be someday.

[Virgil]

We could be someday.
Me and you against the world.
Let's go take walk now.

[toni]

I think that you are the kindest haiku'er ever. ;)
.

I think you're the most romantic haiku'er ever.


Let's go take walk now
Or regret what only could be
A page in memory


Good morning,Uncle Virg!:D

[Virgil]

Morning Toni. Or is evening by you?

Page in memory
can remembered with photos.
Not enough light here.

[subterranean]

Not enough light here
All pale and gray
Senseless they sway.

[toni]

Morning Toni. Or is evening by you?

.

It is evening here. :D Actually, I just had dinner. 8.30pm:p

Not enough light here
To hide my red fantasies
My coffee is cold

[dramasnot6]

Hey morning/evening/everything to Virgil and Toni!!


Not enough light here
Henchmen open the shutters
Shadows steel bullets

[dramasnot6]

darnnit....sorry toni, ill do a new one.

[Virgil]

Hi Subby :wave: I haven't seen you around as much.

Senseless they sway
To the music of the band.
Young couple dancing.

[dramasnot6]

oh, sub did one too. You msut feel like a very popular writer virgil.

okay, i can use both of your lines

Senseless they sway
Cant comprehend their own name
I will go to bed

[dramasnot6]

Young couple dancing
Eyes overwhelmed with cliche
Mass produced roses

[Laindessiel]

Mass produced roses
Sun illumines against me.
Tries to blink away!

[ShoutGrace]

Tries to blink away
But the slime and mud of time
Will not be denied.

[toni]

I truly am Shoutgrace's biggest Haiku fan
This for ya.:thumbs_up :D

Will not be denied
Of freedom from slavery
I am shouting grace..

_______
hihi:)

[Riesa]

Swords sharpened gnawing sharks teeth
Janine-I thought this was a great line. :)

toni-I have to agree with you, shoutgrace's haikus are exceptional.

I am shouting grace
sings the slave trader in
his amazing grace.

[toni]

Hmm...and that gave me an idea! we could start a Shoutgrace fan-club!:)

His amazing grace
A story long never told
Once Upon A Time

[Il Penseroso]

Once upon a time
frozen in knightly glory
a damsel was fleeced.

[toni]

Hello, Il Penseroso :wave: Nice avatar, by the way..:)

A damsel was fleeced
She was forced into the night
She was the Fallen

[Il Penseroso]

Hey toni, thanks. I likewise dig yours.

She was the fallen,
and he the treacherous stair
that could not support.

[toni]

Thanks. Wanna trade? *joking*:)

That could not support
A thousand of quiet screams
The gremlins trembled

[Il Penseroso]

Eh, I'm good. :)

The gremlins trembled
their eyes glistening in view
of humorless men.

[Janine]

Of humorless men
There are many here today
I hope they don't stay


Pretty silly, eh?

[dramasnot6]

I hope they dont stay
Mud tracked with hostess grimace
Time to poison drinks

not as silly as mine!

[Janine]

Time to poison drinks
Bleeds all of the blood of life
Sucked dry of all emotion

[Riesa]

5
7
5
:D

you'll get it. at least your words are pure. :)

bleeds the blood of life
my emotional salvage
kept for reflection.

[Riesa]

She was the fallen,
and he the treacherous stair
that could not support.

I think another fanclub is in order.
that's so dignified and dark, love it. :thumbs_up

[Petrarch's Love]

Kept for reflection
The glistening clear pond where
Narcissus once drowned.

[Riesa]

okay, another fan club. that's great. PL. (btw-how's that poem coming along?)

[Riesa]

narcissus once drowned
age curbing emolients
embodied his ruin

[Janine]

I think another fanclub is in order.
that's so dignified and dark, love it. :thumbs_up

Great h, love the stair reference - terrific! I liked yours too Riesa - very much - the one before this post, with my closing line starting yours. Wonderful!
I changed my second line in that h - I counted, too, but math is not my strong point :( .I will get it right soon, the poem sounded better before, I think, but was not correct form...dern it...

[Janine]

embodied his ruin
the beach to the stranded whale
surf to sand prison

[Virgil]

surf to sand prison
starts one's hike up Everest.
Must trek to thin air.

[Janine]

Must trek to thin air
Boots weighted by snow and pain
The summit is clear!

[toni]

I think another fanclub is in order.
:thumbs_up

Il Penseroso has a way of dignifying my mediocre haiku..:lol:

[Janine]

Love this site - it is so much fun! But I have to go for the night. I am fading away....See all tomorrow! J

[toni]

Good night, Janine! May choirs of poetic rock angles sing thee to sleep...:)

[toni]

the summit is clear
White rain slash thy wasting skin
And I say-Goodbye

[Janine]

Good night, Janine! May choirs of poetic rock angles sing thee to sleep...:)

lol lol lol lol ~ :lol: Thanks Toni, I Love that ....very Hamletish! ...And yet I am still up and it is 1:34! What am I thinking? Soon the choirs of poetic rock angels will drag me to bed.... appropriate haiku for certain, at least last line....now my first line....


And I say-Goodbye
To all my tired confusions
Soon time will be day

[dramasnot6]

Soon time will be day
Clammy digits tug the chord
Flat ECG line

[OZEED]

Flat ECG line
cold sings morbid lullabys
It's not bad at all

[Riesa]

It's not bad at all
the passing years will show us
how to laugh again

[toni]

It's not bad at all
Now I found your pretty face
I want to hold you...

Hiya Oz! :)

[toni]

Aaack posted at the same time!
Next haiku-er follow reisa's last line- Mine's usually flat anyways..:)

[Il Penseroso]

I want to hold you
and teach your aged innocence
how to laugh again.

[toni]

how to laugh again
to give wisdom to the lines
like sad long ago

[Il Penseroso]

Like sad long ago
that dwells by no firelight
of rememberance.

[Janine]

Burn and rage away
Time will stalk the blazen sky
Ember of a day

[Janine]

whoops! Sorry not sure what happened?

[Virgil]

:wave: Hi Janine. Did you follow all those messages?

Ember of the day
passes into late evening.
Whisper for me now.

[Janine]

Hi Virgil......Well, sort of understood them.......but the thing was I had to go out so I had to read them quickly. Now I am tired and overwhelmed with so many messages in my PM tonight. Too tired out to answer them all now.

[Virgil]

That's ok. Not much to say. :)

[Janine]

I really want to watch a movie and relax. Did you get the gist of them and do you agree with the moderators on the question?

Here's my Haiku.....gang.....sorry to keep you waiting


Of rememberance
Fog of day long and tiresome
Memory broke through

[Janine]

your turn V, good opening line for you to start one.

[thefemalemind]

*I'll add in Janine and Il Penseroso's posts*
**oops. i took too long thinking of what to write, sorry.**
Of remembrance
As the quiet embers
Scorched the night and day.

[Laindessiel]

Sorry Janine! It's me here. Is it okay? :)

Memory broke through
Out of midst, into you
Love is what conquers

[Virgil]

Memory broke through
of that girl from the deep past.
She was still lovely.

I think the plan for the Shakespeare thread is not bad as it turned out. :)

[Janine]

gee, was that girl me? LOL :lol:
I will write a poem in a second, What did you think of the email reponses - were you happy with them or do you have other ideas for the Sh thread?

[Virgil]

gee, was that girl me? LOL :lol:
I will write a poem in a second, What did you think of the email reponses - were you happy with them or do you have other ideas for the Sh thread?

Yes, but I think we better keep what was in them private. ;)

[thefemalemind]

she was still lovely
as the breeze kissed her pale cheeks
and leaves circled 'round

[Laindessiel]

Hey Uncle Virg, good evening! I like your haikus a lot! Giving a sort of different mood to each line makes it intersting. My thoughts travel far and wide and it is inspired! ;)

Dang! There are lots of good Haiku'ers in this forum. :thumbs_up::

And leaves circle 'round
The dark misty place haunts me
Like a horror film.

[Janine]

Like a horror film
The lights flicker on many faces
Fear decends upon the crowd

[Virgil]

Hey Uncle Virg, good evening! I like your haikus a lot! Giving a sort of different mood to each line makes it intersting. My thoughts travel far and wide and it is inspired! ;)



Lain, what i try to do and it sometimes works and sometimes not is continue the sentence from the first line, but take it in a different direction than expected; then twist it again with the third line in a summary way but not obvious.

[Janine]

Yes, I am lovely - haha :lol: I get your drift about private - V!

[Virgil]

Fear descends on the crowd
like fog upon a grass field.
He has a rifle.

[Virgil]

Yes, I am lovely - haha :lol: I get your drift about private - V!

I'm sure you are. ;)

[Janine]

That is right, Virgil, you are a pretty twisted person! LOL - sorry just getting tired, really it was cool advice. Hi L, how are you tonight?

[Janine]

He has a rifle
Hot metal in his tense grip
His heart left behind

[Laindessiel]

Lain, what i try to do and it sometimes works and sometimes not is continue the sentence from the first line, but take it in a different direction than expected; then twist it again with the third line in a summary way but not obvious.


It works for me everytime! :)

He has a rifle.
And it went Bang! bang! bang! Bang!
All the people: Dead

[kilted exile]

All the people: Dead
They dont matter anyway
Useless stupid lives

[Janine]

I like yours better L...we must have posted same time! Now what?

[Virgil]

Nice. That wasn't easy.

His heart left behind
for the girl who waved hi.
Short sandy hair curled.

[Janine]

now we have three - with same first line...everyone liked that rifle thingie!

[Virgil]

Just pick from mine. I need to get to bed. Goodnight. :yawnb:

[Janine]

Short sandy hair curled
I gaze into my mirror
Kindness blesses my life


That's me in the haiku of course - I am going to bail out now too. Nite all!

[Janine]

cute poem, Virgil - bye!

[Laindessiel]

Short sandy hair curled
Twist, twist, twist and it hurt lots!
She said "Ouch! Hold it!"

Thanks Janine!

"Night Uncle Virg!

[Janine]

Laindessiel, I never saw so many people who must have posted same time as on the last few pages, really funny to review them and read them all. Everything got mixed up this time around. What a wacky night! Hope tomorrow is better on H. You are getting the gist of it, good advice from Uncle Virgil. I had some pretty silly ones tonight....sorry. Bye all, see you tomorrow!

[OZEED]

She said "Ouch! Hold it!"
It was too late, her heart fell
Smash to smithereens

[dramasnot6]

Smash to smithereens
Beer bottle shards pierce flushed face
Out at the nightclub

[Pensive]

Out in the night-club
all people were dancing madly
she was not only one

[toni]

But she's only one,
For my soul is charred and grim
from the black heartache

___
Im being sad again!:(

[dramasnot6]

that was great toni. I'm too tired to give it credit now but wanted to say whoever follows this one better do it justice:D

[dramasnot6]

g'night all you haikurs , good luck with your writing! cant wait to chek the poetic updates in the morn....

[Il Penseroso]

From the black heartache
in the breast, cold ash stagnates
in no phoenix form.

[Laindessiel]

Laindessiel, I never saw so many people who must have posted same time as on the last few pages, really funny to review them and read them all. Everything got mixed up this time around. What a wacky night! Hope tomorrow is better on H.

Yeah! It's very confusing to read!


You are getting the gist of it, good advice from Uncle Virgil.

I am inspired, as always, by him. He's just a very venerable man you couldn't help but to be awed. I try not to simulate but just emulate. Hope it comes across...:)

In no phoenix form
Could she rise from the ashes.
Holds are often barred.

Yo Penseroso!

[Janine]

L, Glad he inspires you. So funny you call him Uncle V. I am older than him. Probably the matriach on this site...sigh. V is a big help to me, also. I seem to be getting the hang of writing H now. Last nights posts were really funny and confusing, as you agree. Our timing as group was all off. Must have been the moon....ha.
Love this new Haiku of yours. You are getting better all the time!

Holds are often barred
In hearts cracked now so wretched
Stark reality

[Il Penseroso]

Stark reality
shifts in continual gaze
to blurred contortions.

[Laindessiel]

L, Glad he inspires you. So funny you call him Uncle V. I am older than him. Probably the matriach on this site...sigh. V is a big help to me, also. I seem to be getting the hang of writing H now. Last nights posts were really funny and confusing, as you agree. Our timing as group was all off. Must have been the moon....ha.
Love this new Haiku of yours. You are getting better all the time!

Thanks lots Janine! (Or would you like to be called Auntie Janine? I'd be honored to have an aunt as you are!) I'm uplifted with the words "getting better"!!!! Wow...

Stark reality
Drives egos away from us.
Or, yeah, maybe not.

[Janine]

Thanks lots Janine! (Or would you like to be called Auntie Janine? I'd be honored to have an aunt as you are!) I'm uplifted with the words "getting better"!!!! Wow...

Stark reality
Drives egos away from us.
Or, yeah, maybe not.

No thanks! :lol: Janine is just fine. I am young at heart, believe me! :D

Oh, yeah, maybe not
Don't call me auntie because
I'm so young at heart.


HAHALOLOLOL!!!!:lol:

[Janine]

Sorry, have to bail out for now. Have to clean my house - ugh~

[Petrarch's Love]

Good luck with the cleaning, Janine. :)

I'm so young at heart
That I feel like I'm sixteen
At four score and eight

[Janine]

Good luck with the cleaning, Janine. :)

I'm so young at heart
That I feel like I'm sixteen
At four score and eight


Thanks P, ugh on the cleaning. I just put away all my many shoes so I can find the floor. Got tired already :sick: .Step one - tiny baby steps, I am afraid. My rooms are "Creativity gone a muck!" Just taking tiny break before dinner.
I liked your haiku! BTW - I have a Feb birthday coming up soon, too! Someone else on here is closer to mine. We will have to get a virual reality cake....what do you think?

Il Penseroso, I loved your haiku! very cool!

:D Here's my go ---

At four score and eight
I thought "how aged I am now"
Quite silly was I

[Petrarch's Love]

I commiserate regarding the ugh about cleaning. I've been doing some cleaning myself-- just finished scrubing the bird cage (good thing I love the messy little critter :p ). Hey, a shared February cake sounds fun. We could get a really big one and eat it all month long (after all, nothing goes stale in virtual reality ;). Lest my last haiku give a false impression of my seniority:D :

How silly was I
To pretend I'm eighty eight
At four and twenty.

[Janine]

At four and twenty
Sixpense he found a treasure
Fine beloved token

Petrarch, Yes, huge cake we can nibble at all month......great idea! ......and no calories either - let it have lots of decadent frosting. YUMMY!

[brainstrain]

Fine beloved token
Treasure beyond all reason
The eternal thought

Hm...not sure it makes sense. Oh well, at least i got didn't just make up my own random one like last time.

[brainstrain]

the eternal thought
is of all mankind alike
and forevermore

a bit more coherent...i still need more practice =D

[Virgil]

And forevermore
I will strive to seek justice.
Let him burn in hell.

[kilted exile]

Let him burn in hell
Crimes against the working man
No redemption here

[Petrarch's Love]

No redemption here
Oh, to move to purgatory
That lucky Dante!

[Janine]

Wow, you gifted poets have some great H's here. My hat is off to all of you! I was gone and you filled the page. I especially like Brainstorms, the first one...

Fine beloved token
Treasure beyond all reason
The eternal thought

I think Virgil needs to write the next H with that starting line. He read Dante and I did not, so I am at a lose. I have the book, but have not read it...it is on my list of "someday...."

[Laindessiel]

Mmmmm...seems like Janine always is on the lookout for Uncle Virg....Hihihi...

Is it alright if I take it from the last line?

The eternal thought
Famished from the heavens. Now
The laundry is clean.

[OZEED]

The laundry is clean
fresh smelling towels are the best
Crisp white shirts come close

[toni]

Crisp white shirts come close
But nothing compared to the
Blue shirts made of snow

hiya Oz!:wave:

[OZEED]

Blue shirts made of snow
Never need ironing at all
And make you look cool

How you doing Toni? always a pleasure to see your light green

[toni]

And make you look cool
Shades, caps cellphone and cap too
Why don't we eat out?

Howzit, Oz? Im doing okeydokey. What is my light green? :confused:

[dramasnot6]

Why dont we eat out?
Gellato paves Venice streets
Gourmand gondola

[toni]

Hey, my lovey dovey dramasnot is here!:wave:

Gourmand gondola
both eyes glued at the face of
masculine perfection

[OZEED]

Why don't we eat out?
anymore, I miss those days
cheeseburgers at six

Your light is green, when you are online.:lol: :lol: :lol:
I see you've been reading the slang thread;)

[OZEED]

Oooops I'm sorry about that, I took ages to post.I'm having lunch

[toni]

tis okay, Im making dinner...
Ive been reading the slang thread, yeah, Im gonna post some from me own country, Laind and I are just making them "ipon-ipon" (compiling)

Cheeseburgers at six
Red wine when the clock strikes nine
Midnight, have to flee

[dramasnot6]

Hey, my lovey dovey dramasnot is here!:wave:

Gourmand gondola
both eyes glued at the face of
masculine perfection

Sure am! And I am honored to be the first one to commend you on that fantastic haiku! i think we both know who we can assciate it with....aww to be with movie stars in Italy....*dayddreams a little*;) :D

Midnight, have to flee
Prekarious slipper stays
Marital mistake

[Virgil]

Cheeseburgers at six
Red wine when the clock strikes nine
Midnight, have to flee

Hey I love that one. Very nice, toni. :thumbs_up

[dramasnot6]

aww i was hoping to write another haiku before i left for bed! ah well, ill get my hopes up for the morning. Night y'all.

[Laindessiel]

Marital mistake
Is one another problem.
Then marry again!

[kilted exile]

Then marry again
Suffer the pain twice over
Live as a hermit

[Laindessiel]

Cruel, Kilt...:(

Live as a hermit
Fifty thousand leagues under.
I reciprocate.

[kilted exile]

I reciprocate
Continuously back, forth
Oh to be linear

[Laindessiel]

Oh, to be linear
Limns lethargy licitly.
Bam! Ouch, whatta whack.

[kilted exile]

Bam! Ouch Whatta Whack
Ali lands a nice clean punch
"And down goes Frazier"

[Laindessiel]

Hehe...I know what inspired you that. :D

"And down goes Frazier"
"One, two, three, four, five...seven...EIGHT
Prrrrrrrrrrrttt! Ali has won!"

[kilted exile]

Prrrt! Ali has won
One more glorious vict'ry
Now to the future

[Laindessiel]

Vic'try huh? Nice one!

Now to the future
And into the past, we go.
Pestilence! Illused.