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[Riesa]

awake from heartache,
slip to sleep from desire
to dream of dreaming

[MondayFairchild]

to dream of dreaming,
seeing with eyes unclouded,
my faith unshaken

[kre8ivkath]

my faith unshaken
by hurtful words sees smiles and
still staggers sometimes

[SnámhDáÉan]

Very odd sci-fi
Can not spoil this, our first date.
"Aren't you frightened?"

[SnámhDáÉan]

(rats, i read the wrong page)

[ShoutGrace]

Still staggers sometimes
Under the weight of past love,
Can't fight the feeling.

[Bookworm89]

Can't fight the feeling
Of melancholy so deep
Although I try hard.

[Weeping Willow]

Although I try hard
I cannot become happy
Just more and more sad.

[Bookworm89]

Just more and more sad,
The drooping tree seems to be
As winter comes fast.

[Weeping Willow]

As winter comes fast
The worms start crawlling inside
My hollow dead trunk.

[Bookworm89]

My hollow dead trunk
And all my crisp, falling leaves
Make a great season.

[Virgil]

awake from heartache,
slip to sleep from desire
to dream of dreaming

Hi Riesa, I'm back.:wave:

Make a great season
if your baseball team wins games.
Then the world series.

[Riesa]

hey V. How was your trip?

then the world series
concerns the world less then
Paris Hilton's lips.


:p

[Virgil]

hey V. How was your trip?

then the world series
concerns the world less then
Paris Hilton's lips.


:p

Fine thank you. I'll post a few pictures when I develop some film.

But I'm not doing a haiku on Paris Hilton's lips. :lol: :lol: I may get myself in trouble with the sensers. :D

[Riesa]

oh come now. a little naughty haiku is all right isn't it? Just don't insult someone's religion.

[Virgil]

Paris Hilton's lips
can stir the imagination.
Oh lewd fantasies.

:D :p

[RobinHood3000]

Heehee...my turn. :D

Oh, lewd fantasies
Fill adolescent boys' minds
Fun is had by all. :brow:

[Riesa]

fun is had by all
when wicked dreaming becomes
a sultry embrace.

whew that was difficult for some reason.

[RJbibliophil]

Very odd Sci-fi.
The Dark Knight and strange events
Unsolved mystery

[ktd222]

Unsolved mystery:
which came first, the chicken or
the egg? Anyone?

[Bookworm89]

The egg? Anyone?
Did you find the egg I dropped
Upon the sidewalk.

[ktd222]

Upon the sidewalk
I found a new born rodent.
XY, I named him.

[thefemalemind]

Im new here and im going to try this out. im not very good at huiku's but i will definatily try
XY I named him
oh so sad, so lonely
left out in the cold

[Riesa]

not bad, just remember we try to stick to the
5
7
5
syllable rule, you almost had it.
:D Welcome to the forum.

left out in the cold
only needing a cozy
"it'll be all right,"

[thefemalemind]

oh. whoops. im not very good at that. i had to do it for an assignment for class. thx.

"it'll be alright,"
whispered ktd222
"there's no cold tonight,"

[Virgil]

Welcome femalemind. You're getting the hang of it.

there's no cold tonight.
Abandoned child will survive.
The preist takes her in.

[Petrarch's Love]

The priest takes her in
And, in disbelief, she thanks
His faithful kindness.

[Riesa]

his faithful kindness
soothes, but he lacks realism,
she's deeper than that

[Petrarch's Love]

She's deeper than that
Skin of hers. She's got muscle
Underneath it all.

[MondayFairchild]

she's deeper than that,
teetering between silent
darkness and wellsprings

---
Hey everybody! I feel excited and nervous and shy at being a newbie, but I'm looking forward to having a lot of fun here. I think the best thing about joining a forum is the great exchange of ideas that happens, and I think that's a really great thing for people like me who love to read and write stuff. :D :D

[MondayFairchild]

Darn, Petrarch must have posted while I was typing. ^^ I'll try again.

Underneath it all
Maybe it doesn't show but
She's got it, alright

[Riesa]

she's got it alright,
polish and shine, hair just right
but she lost her heart

[thefemalemind]

Welcome Monday. i'm new too!


but she lost her heart
its been left out in the cold
where she used to roam

[ktd222]

where she used to roam
required a two-step and toot,
do-do-de-le-do.

[thefemalemind]

do-do-de-le-do
she hummed every now and then
in the falling snow

[ktd222]

in the falling snow,
unoticed, the only trace
left was a pee trail.

[Bookworm89]

Left was a pee trail-
Oops, I meen - mean - a pea trail
From the hungry cow.

[ktd222]

From the hungry cow
came green milk. Definitely
because of the peas.

[thefemalemind]

How's everyone doing today?


Because of the peas
There was a green dotted trail,
So hard to follow

[SnámhDáÉan]

So hard to follow
Is there anything at all
Dearest Finnegan?

[Virgil]

Dearest Finnegan,
I am so sorry to tell you,
but I met another.

:D

[Riesa]

an Irish Dear John letter? :D

but I met another
with eyes soft beyond dreaming;
and padded accounts.

:p

[Petrarch's Love]

And padded accounts
Make for a soft fall when the
Market takes a dip.

[mizzimad]

Market takes a dip.
Oh, that a gecko so fair
Could insure my love!


(Come on! Play along. :P)

[ShoutGrace]

Could ensure my love,
Though common concerns
Keep me wondering.

[thefemalemind]

Oops sry. i got mixed up. i fixed it

Keep me wondering
About where you were that day,
That day on the lake.

[ktd222]

thefemalemind, you have too many syllables so I'm gonna follow Shoutgrace's haiku.

keep me wondering
about the morgage payment
to follow phone bills.

[thefemalemind]

to follow phone bills
means getting a job, and i'm
just too lazy to.

[mizzimad]

Just too lazy to.
Or is it fear which binds me
In both love and life?

[ShoutGrace]

In both love and life,
Decisions will be made that
Time will be cruel of.

[kilted exile]

*Hmmm that was strange

[Runar]

Merlin's beard turns green
He used Grecian Formula -
Who put the dye in?

[Runar]

Syllables are defined by vowels (that' why linguists call vowels "syllabics"). It can be pronounced monosyllabically, like "fool" or bisyllabically, like "feul".

I have a degree in this kind of stuff.

[MondayFairchild]

Time will be cruel of
what comes before and after
Merlin's beard turns green

---
Does 'cruel' have one syllable or two?

[Gordon Comstock]

Merlin's beard turns green
All men stand in hebetude
As Arthur proceeds

[thefemalemind]

cruel only has one because if you put your hand about an inch under your chin and you say it, it only hits your hand once! thats how i learned




as arthur proceeds
into the overwhelming
realm of the unknown

[ShoutGrace]

Realm of the unknown,
Shifting land of shadow, why
Can't I get a grip?

[thefemalemind]

Can't i get a grip?
why oh why o why can't i
understand the lies.

[4rum]

understand the lies
railed against Natures good grace
she ever bears wrong

[Riesa]

she ever bears wrong;
orange tree giving lemons
and miniscule pears.

[Laindessiel]

And miniscule pears
Worms tend to eat in the dark
Covered with the leaves

[Virgil]

And miniscule pears
Worms tend to eat in the dark
Covered with the leaves

Nice one, Laindessiel.

Covered with the leaves
Are acorns for winter snacks.
Bushy tails wave back.

[Laindessiel]

Thanks, Virg! I am not a poet, actually, I'll leave that to Toni... But I'll try it once in a while...

Bushy tails wave back
Behind mahogany trees.
They whisper goodbye.

[kilted exile]

They whisper goodbye
Before smothering their child
With an old pillow

[thefemalemind]

They whisper goodbye
Before smothering their child
With an old pillow

wow... thats negative...

with an old pillow
i quietly lay and try to sleep
on a hard matress.

[Riesa]

on a hard mattress,
on top of a pea, the prince
shall find his princess

[RobinHood3000]

Shall find his princess
After a long, painful wait,
Longing for him, too.

[Riesa]

guess what? I thought of you and Elizabeth when I wrote that.

longing for him too
daydreams cascade like waltzes
as day fades away

[RobinHood3000]

Awww, thank you, Riesa!

As day fades away
Dusk gives way to the twilight
Of newfound lovers.

[toni]

Of newfound lovers
As I did the night before.
ghastly tunes I hear.

[Riesa]

:D

ghastly tunes I hear,
the beat jars my seatbelt loose,
highschool traffic jams

[shinigami]

highschool traffic jam
stoplights blinking on and off
move you stupid cars!!!

[toni]

Move you stupid cars
To Hell I am now headed so..
pave way now or die..

----
Okay, that was horrible..

[Virgil]

Thanks, Virg! I am not a poet, actually, I'll leave that to Toni... But I'll try it once in a while...

Bushy tails wave back
Behind mahogany trees.
They whisper goodbye.

You're welcome. Wow, just noticed, you've got about a hundred posts in less than a week. I guess you like lit net. :)

Pave wave now or die
But first put your toys away.
Girl is dramatic.
:D

[Laindessiel]

You're welcome. Wow, just noticed, you've got about a hundred posts in less than a week. I guess you like lit net. :)

Pave wave now or die
But first put your toys away.
Girl is dramatic.
:D

I sure love it here! :lol: :lol: :lol:

Everytime I get the chance, I would become the worst mouse potato in the entirety of the universe, enduring my mom's complaints and a-scoldings every night when I sleep at no earlier than 2am (she's getting concerned about my pimples...).

Girl is dramatic
Thinking of abyss and void.
But eats chocolates.

[mizzimad]

But eats chocolates.
She succumbs to each sinful
Aphrodisiac.

[Laindessiel]

Aphrodisiac
Venerable, it won't be
But for males, maybe

[Virgil]

But for males, maybe
Females would rule this planet.
Give the girls a chance.

[Laindessiel]

Give the girls a chance.
Shut your freaking babblers up.
And don't scorn like that.

[Virgil]

Give the girls a chance.
Shut your freaking babblers up.
And don't scorn like that.

:lol: :lol: Isn't language amazing? You changed the whole tone of where I was by starting the second sentence with "Shut...".

And don't scorn like that
Or your face will freeze solid.
Now go clean your room.

[ShoutGrace]

Now go clean your room
And don't attempt to argue,
My rage is boundless.

[toni]

Now go clean your room
And don't attempt to argue,
My rage is boundless.

My rage is boundless
Crouched like a wild animal
Numb beyond belief.

[Gordon Comstock]

Numb beyond belief
They hear the warmth of winter
Lost in tranquil thoughts

[toni]

Lost in tranquil thoughts
I suddenly heard him sing
the sky turned to ash

[RobinHood3000]

The sky turned to ash,
Demons rose from smoking ground
Hell, Earth indistinct.

[toni]

Hell, Earth indistinct
Dance with the devils and filth
Chained screams, I set free

[Dr Eep]

Chained screams, I set free
corrosion for once,a friend
my broken gait is my delirious dance

[Laindessiel]

Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that... ;) ;)

[ShoutGrace]

Hell, Earth indistinct
Dance with the devils and filth
Chained screams, I set free

Chained screams, I set free
restricted personages
In the vein of love.

[Dr Eep]

Laindessiel wrote;
Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that...

Oops - OH Gawd - I stuffed up!!:crash: :D

After doing some hasty reminding of the use of syllables, is this better?

In the vein of love
move swift and free
take my soul there

Geez - I hope so:sick:

[ShoutGrace]

Haiku:
1. A Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

2. A poem written in this form.

:D :D


Take my soul there
Into a realm of quiet and
unremitted peace.

[Laindessiel]

Laindessiel wrote;
Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that...

Oops - OH Gawd - I stuffed up!!:crash: :D

After doing some hasty reminding of the use of syllables, is this better?

In the vein of love
move swift and free
take my soul there

Geez - I hope so:sick:

You still must get your self sick, Doc...the last line is now composed of lesser than 10 but lesser than 5!!! Now how's that? Can I prescribe you something? :blush: :D :idea:

I want to get you all better! You are such a very moving poet!! I read your poems in your thread and it moved me heaven and earth!:thumbs_up :thumbs_up :thumbs_up

[Laindessiel]

:D :D


Take my soul there
Into a realm of quiet and
unremitted peace.

Shoutgrace, same goes for you, dear....
:blush:

[kilted exile]

Unremmitted peace
No break from constant warfare
Into the bunker

[Laindessiel]

Into the bunker
Crime and love still lay asleep.
Wish they would not wake.

[kilted exile]

Wish they would not wake
But somehow they always do
Lets kill Prince Charming

[Laindessiel]

Let's kill Prince Charmong
Not yet, said Charming Princess
"I will kiss him first"

[Riesa]

I will kiss him first,
before I recede into
mist and nothingness

[thefemalemind]

mist and nothingness
its what i feel inside me
im a slowly dying leaf

[toni]

In slowly dying leaf
I sing lullabies to thee...
So long and goodnight...

[Dr Eep]

This Haiku man....:flare: :lol:

How many syllables in the word 'Hari Kiri' - cos that's what I'm going to commit if I can't get this right.
4 right??? PLease tell me I'm right????
AS for the game;

Ahem...
So long and goodnight
my ego is blasted bare
come hari kiri:blush: :blush: :p

[toni]

Hi Dr Eep!!! You are right, .. Don't worry...
Anyway...

Come hari kiri,
thy sins have aged in teardrops
hand me the dagger...

--
was that good?

[ShoutGrace]

It was good for me.



Hand me the dagger
Remember how I told you
She would pay some day?

[kilted exile]

She would pay some day,
She had always promised to
Loan still unpaid

[Laindessiel]

Loan IS still unpaid (Kilt, you only composed a line of 4 syllables)
Trudges on her dampened heart
And moist conscience too

[ShoutGrace]

And moist conscience too
Cannot deter us from this
Path of wanton hate.

[Laindessiel]

Path of wanton hate
Heedlessly begs for a snap.
Flailing from the thread

[kilted exile]

Loan IS still unpaid (Kilt, you only composed a line of 4 syllables)


Nonsense, I just stressed both Lo & an :p

[Laindessiel]

Palusot!!!

[ShoutGrace]

Flailing from the thread,
A tenuous grasp of my
Fading sanity.

[Laindessiel]

Fading sanity
Washed away in the waters,
Oh! I can now think!

[ShoutGrace]

Oh! I can now think
Of the things that I never
Did when you were here.

[Laindessiel]

Did, when you were here
Illogical sound reasons
Made it more worthwhile.

[ShoutGrace]

Made it more worthwhile
Laying in your arms that night
Thinking of your friend.

[thefemalemind]

thinking of your friend,
that one who always cared most.
your friend 'till the end

[OZEED]

Your friend till the end
Uncompromising truth told
Childhood memories

[MondayFairchild]

Childhood memories
Catalogued like a phonebook--
Pages of yellow

[Riesa]

pages of yellow
moth wings crumbling, shimmery
dust of final flights

[ShoutGrace]

Dust of final flights
Dissipating into the
Air where we just were.

[Virgil]

Air where we just were
Stinks like a furry wombat.
Who brought the horse in?

[dramasnot6]

Who brought the horse in?
Tail brushes in discontent
Green fields unsettled

[Riesa]

green fields unsettled,
but spoken for; wal-mart knows
opportunity

welcome to the forum, dramasnot. :D

[thefemalemind]

opportunity...
the right place for the right time.
does this hafta rhyme?


hehe!

[Virgil]

Hey we've go a great new group playing haiku. :thumbs_up Welcome and thanks all.


Does this hafta rhyme?
Not until the end of time.
Can you spare a dime?
:D

[shinigami]

dust of final flight,
from the wings of yellow moths,
electricity

[ the moths were zapped to death...]

[kilted exile]

Does this hafta rhyme?
Not until the end of time.
Can you spare a dime?
:D


dust of final flight,
from the wings of yellow moths,
electricity


Just tidying things up:

Can You Spare A Dime?
Cant afford to pay for the
Electricity

[Riesa]

Electricity;
crunch wintergreen lifesavers,
entertain the kids.

[dramasnot6]

Entertain the kids
Pierced juice boxes stain work clothes
Laughter nonetheless
(thanks for the welcome riesa! i love it here)

[ShoutGrace]

Laughter nonetheless
Permeates this solemn act
Smiling, I cut in.

[Virgil]

Smiling, I cut in
And dance with the pretty girl.
Slow dance under moon.

[OZEED]

slow dance under moon
does it get better than this?
lets not go from here

I love this, I just learnt about haiku

[dramasnot6]

Lets not go from here
Time wielding blades of danger
Cower as corpses

[Riesa]

cower as corpses
of old Japanese battles
strewn with ghost haiku

[dramasnot6]

Strewn with ghost haiku
Ressurecting syllables
Words live forever

[OZEED]

Words live forever
like weathered rocks they stand strong
look at that mountain

[dramasnot6]

Look at that mountain
The breeze carreses my wings
Countryside flying

[Riesa]

nice haiku, drama.

Countryside flying
vulnerable to winds quick
and precarious

[kre8ivkath]

and precarious
ventures sometimes need a net
for falling flyers

[dramasnot6]

for falling flyers
World of harsh statements printed
Then thrown into wind

[ShoutGrace]

Then thrown into wind
Cares and considerations
Have no real sway here.

[dramasnot6]

Have no real sway here
Oppresion silenced all voice
Shoved into pavement

[Laindessiel]

Have no real sway here
Oppresion silenced all voice
Shoved into pavement


Dramasnot6, the last line was 7 syllables...

I'd like to hop on backwards to Shoutgrace's...

Have no real sway here
Locked in the pages of you.
Stocked piles of cold dreams.

[B-Mental]

Stocked piles of cold dreams
empty hollow tin refuse
loitering my past

[RobinHood3000]

Only 5, actually.

Loitering my past
Panhandling by the curbside
Shoved in-to pave-ment

[toni]

Shoved in-to pavement
Dragging chains and cold feet
feeding on your dreams...

[Virgil]

Feeding on your dreams
I roll over and snuggle.
Her shoulder feels cold.

[OZEED]

her shoulder feels cold
with winter lips black and blue
Dont go, dont go, stay

[Laindessiel]

Don't go, don't go, stay
Chasing sanity, don't leave.
No more running, please

[dramasnot6]

it was 5!
shoved=1 its not pronounced Sho-Ved
in-to= 2
pave-ment= 2 (could u have thought "pa-veh-ment"????)
2+2+1=5 syllables

[dramasnot6]

No more running, please
Blisters engulf weary feet
The finish line looms

[MondayFairchild]

The finish line looms--
Don't yell at me, I know where
I'm going... I think

[Laindessiel]

it was 5!
shoved=1 its not pronounced Sho-Ved
in-to= 2
pave-ment= 2 (could u have thought "pa-veh-ment"????)
2+2+1=5 syllables

Oh I am truly sorry, Dramasnot!!!! :( :(

I don't know what's gotten into me at that time but I seriously counted it to have 7 syllables!! I admit I messed up. Oh, geez, man, I am so sorry...

Don't worry, I DO know how to speak. :thumbs_up

And yes, please take pride in your Haiku abilities. It is highly laudable. :)

Peace?


I'm going...I think
Where gods and beasts live and die...
"Die", such a long word....

[dramasnot6]

oh im sorry i got all evil there....i just re-read my post and it was very irrational. very sorry...but my poems are like my children, as sad as that is. but thank you sincerely. mucho peace.

"Die", such a long word....
Brief upon lips, yet in hearts
Infinity reins

[ShoutGrace]

Infinity reigns,
Completely overwhelming
Smaller niceties.

[Laindessiel]

Smaller niceties:
Hungry for bigger favors
Not enough, Love says

[Riesa]

Not enough, Love says,
propping open the closing
doors of indifference.

[jon1jt]

doors of indifference
like trees clap color's last call,
winter closes them

[toni]

Winter closes them
Knitting memories of past
Crawling one by one

[ShoutGrace]

Crawling one by one
We inch toward the guillotine
Eager for the end.

[toni]

Eager for the end
To see the new horizon
Lying in a haze

[ShoutGrace]

Lying in a haze
Of sated lust and faded
Thoughts of what we were.

[toni]

Thoughts of what we were
Whirling in a dark malice
Veiled with lies, deceit.

---
That's sad!

[ShoutGrace]

Yes it is. ;)


Veiled with lies, deceit -
Our selfish, brilliant dance,
Preserved by our fear.

[toni]

Preserved by our fear
I smell your sins and blunders
Please do, set me free

-----
Now that was really sad!

[OZEED]

Please do, set me free
This was not part of the deal
Mascara eyes run

[dramasnot6]

WOW!! those last few haikus are amazing. well done!!!

Mascara eyes run
Pupils cower behind glass
Tainted waterfall

[OZEED]

Tainted waterfall
debris of deceit and pain
flood their banks with hurt

[toni]

Good, one, dear OZ.

Flood their banks of hurt
My stained fantsy crouches,
and poised quick to strike

[Laindessiel]

And poised quick to strike
Were storms looming on pure life.
Evil is at hand.

[Ubiquitous Prat]

Evil is at hand
There a sex offender lose
He has a hardon

[Riesa]

he has a hard on,
a gun, a bottle of Jack-
Welcome to Texas.

[dramasnot6]

Welcome to Texas
A harmless nature slumbers
Shotguns have a laugh

[dcdavi]

shotguns have a laugh
between Cheney's buddies what's
a hole in the head

[dramasnot6]

hehe, i love urs dcdavi:lol: sad yet true

A hole in the head
Thoughts straining to be set free
Porous redemption

[toni]

Porous redemption
Slowly inching my way to
never ending dream

______

* Inviting ShoutGrace!*

[Laura11]

It has been fun reading you.
Thanks

[dramasnot6]

Never ending dream
With eyelids, world closes off
Pupil of the mind

[Laindessiel]

Pupil of the mind
Water gushes out of it
Leaving me in daze

[dramasnot6]

Leaving me in daze
Ravenous vertigo chews
Spits out dark circles

[OZEED]

he has a hard on,
a gun, a bottle of Jack-
Welcome to Texas.

that was awesome!!:thumbs_up

[OZEED]

Spits out dark circles
an abyss of nothingness
a black hole of fear

[ShoutGrace]

A black hole of fear
As she steps to the edge of
The long diving board.

[toni]

The long diving board
Taking my little death march,
Chorus starts to play

[dramasnot6]

Chorus starts to play
Hummingbirds dive into tune
Verdent ovation

[dramasnot6]

i loved your short story toni! esp "The dark forest wiggled", that imagery just struck me. your poem "paralell" had a beautiful use of language too. well done!
oh..and i too have a thing for cedric driggory ...;) :p
hehehe....keep up the good work!

[ShoutGrace]

Verdant ovation -
Vegetables and garden things
Acclaim the wise mind.

[toni]

i loved your short story toni! esp "The dark forest wiggled", that imagery just struck me. your poem "paralell" had a beautiful use of language too. well done!
oh..and i too have a thing for cedric driggory ...;) :p
hehehe....keep up the good work!

Thanks for taking time to read my story, Dramasnot! It is just the first part, there is more to come. I haven't just gotten around to typing it.. :P

Ooohh, so you like Cedric too eh?:thumbs_up :D It is just too bad he wont be in the fifth movie!!:bawling:


For the HAIKU:

Acclaim the wise mind,
Of forgotten symphonies
Old and new reborn

[inmyownworld]

old and new reborn
Of love, and life, and dreamers
was i ever seen?

[Laindessiel]

I think I'm gonna be the first one to welcome you, inmyownworld! I saw you registering just 5 mins. ago. Welcome to LitNet! You'll enjoy it here, I swear.

Was I ever seen
Hiding behind the dry leaves
Panting for bullets?

[toni]

Panting for bullets
Crying in vain for sanity
Shadow runs alone..

[ShoutGrace]

Shadow runs alone -
Like the trickle of blood that
Blinds my angry eyes.

[toni]

Blinds my angry eyes
Of destructive metaphors
Waste of hard, dry shame..

:)

[ShoutGrace]

Waste of hard, dry shame
A fount of expenditure
Shows the folly done.

Hi toni! :wave: :D

[toni]

Shows the folly done,
Puzzles, science left unsolved
Left in blank mazes..

Hi Shoutgrace!:) :) :)

[OZEED]

left in blank mazes
similair to life I live
conundrum of pain

[Laindessiel]

Conundrum of pain
Important, to keep you sane,
At least for a while

[Virgil]

At least for a while
Mickey Mouse and that Hamlet
Hung out together.

[Riesa]

hung out together
like old-time washer women
pinning flapping sheets

[Virgil]

pinning flapping sheets
on a windy day is like
sailing sideways left

[Riesa]

sailing sideways left
may bring you full about, but
most boats prefer South

[dramasnot6]

Most boats prefer south
Yet mine in dangerous seas
Catches bigger fish

[Riesa]

hmm. I seem to always like your haiku, drama.

catches bigger fish
than me-yet doesn't like to
gut, cook, or eat them

[ShoutGrace]

Gut, cook, or eat them
When they start annoying you
Siblings can be tough.

[toni]

Siblings can be tough,
Oh yeah tell me about it...
always running 'round..

Hi shoutgrace:):):):)

[ShoutGrace]

Hello there toni. :D :banana:

Always running 'round
Jumping through posts, threads, titles
Just to see a friend.

[toni]

Just to see a friend
Braving limp fingers, mouse-ing
Everthing's worthwhile..

_____

I am terrible at HAIKU today...:)

[ShoutGrace]

Not as bad as me. ;)

Everything's worthwhile
When you find you are nearing
What you thought was dear.

[toni]

What d'you mean? I think you're the best!:)

What you thought was dear
Now stings memories, old,new
spinning into void..

________

Now that is just terrible..

[dramasnot6]

Spinning into void..
Yarns nibbles through ragged skin
Eyes strung out to fade

And thanks Riesa! i really like yours too, that last one was really clever.:D

[Virgil]

Eyes strung out to fade
after too many whiskies.
Let's go to bed now.

[ShoutGrace]

Lets go to bed now
Don't think of it like that, its
Just a bed, Caddy. ;)

[toni]

Just a bed, Caddy
No wishing tongues and whispers
Of sins, innocence

[Ubiquitous Prat]

Of sins, innocence
Hatred swamps my mind
I dont like sex

[Laindessiel]

Yecchhs...

I don't like sex.
But if you're talking gender,
I think not at all

Hello there, UbiquitousPrat! Welcome to the forum! I have yet to know you but I honestly think you are not a prat. Seriously. :)

[Ubiquitous Prat]

I think not at all
Perhaps, only of playin chicken on the district line
They come whilst you sleep



Laindessiel, thanks, i think anyway. I see I dont like sex had the effect i was hoping for ;)

[Laindessiel]

Funny you think you are. ;) Well, I think of myself as a realist, sometimes lost, sometimes found (or sane). :D

The "S" word...creeps me out, dude. Or dudette. Which are you?


They come whilst you sleep
Haunting ghosts, playing checkers
And you don't waken


Pardon the Haiku. I am not the best in here. My sis is one of, though. Toni right there.

And by the way, a Haiku consists of
5 syllables on the first line
7 syllables on the second
5 again in the third. :)

[toni]

Oh Geez. I don't think I am good at all. But you know, trying to be...:)

And you don't waken
After a thousand great sighs
I would cry dark tears...

[Virgil]

I would cry dark tears
If you packed your bag tonight.
So deal or no deal?

[toni]

So deal or no deal
Deal, would go on seeing him
No deal I would leave

___
It doesn't make any sense at all, does it?:)

[toni]

So deal or no deal
Deal, would go on seeing him
No deal I would leave

___
It doesn't make any sense at all, does it?:alien: :(

[toni]

Oh Geez, why can't we ever delete a double post? Now it is a triple post...

[jackthomas]

No deal I would leave
Winter soltice to receive
Blossoms in the spring

[dramasnot6]

Blossoms in the spring
Everything in the season
Shrilly shrieks romance

[OZEED]

Shrilly shrieks romance
intoxicating frangrance
makes my knees feel weak

[toni]

Looks like we have a new face here at the HAIKU thread!
Welcome to lItnet, jackthomas! :) Congratulations on your first post!:)

Makes my knees feel weak
Black hatred fill thy scorned lips
Struggling to break free

[thefemalemind]

that's 6 syl on the last line toni i think. i could b wrong

[RobinHood3000]

Not if it's like this:

Strugg'ling to break free
Woman chained to the stone bricks
Subject to his will. :brow:

[Laindessiel]

No, it is 5.

Strug- 1
Ling- 2
To- 3
Break- 4
Free- 5

Hi there!

Struggling to break free
From the sad ghosts of my past
Flailing from a thread

[Laindessiel]

Arrrr, Rob!

[RobinHood3000]

Merriam-Webster's confirms that "struggling" is but two syllables.

[Laindessiel]

Unless you pronounce it as "stru-ggeh-ling". Haha.

Am I supposed to continue my own Haiku?

[RobinHood3000]

Allow me:

Flailing from a thread
Spider, poised between two hands
Subject to his will

[toni]

Subject to his will
The spider sprouts silver wings
Now, its time to fly

Hey, rob, guess what, I already finished the Airbourne Honour!:)

[RobinHood3000]

Now, it's time to fly
Alarm's gone off, there's trouble!
The Warriors take flight


Thanks -- what'd you think?

[toni]

The Warriors take flight
to the Zu mountains to fight
with their katanas

Two words, man-
Really Good.:)
Normally, the title alone has the power to make me allergic to the story, seeing that it is about planes and wars. But yours, man, it was different.. You've got a special power indeed. A writer by day and a vigilant superhero at night?

[dramasnot6]

With their katanas
Blades glimmer in the crimson sun
They charge with vigour

[ShoutGrace]

They charge with vigor -
Running towards their lives so fast,
Then trip, crawl towards graves.

[Laindessiel]

Um, is the word "towards" just composed of 1 syllable, like "tords"? Because if it's not, I'm afraid the last line has 6 syllables.

Hi ShoutGrace!

[ShoutGrace]

Well, hello Laindessiel. How do you say 'towards'? One thing you did forget to mention - if 'towards' is more than one syllable, then my second line is invalid as well, and deserving similar criticism. ;)

[Laindessiel]

Like "TOH-wards".

[ShoutGrace]

Well, what should we do about it? Maybe we should take a poll! Have people vote as to whether or not my haiku is valid - see if there is anybody out there who would be willing to try to use it, assuming that it can be pronounced with just one syllable?

[Laindessiel]

Haha! I'll just ask Mr. Webster about it. Don't worry. Wait a sec. :)

[ShoutGrace]

Well, after that's done, then I think we might need to have a little talk.

[Laindessiel]

Right. Mr. Webster pronounces it as "TOH-wards".

So I guess you'll just have to make another one!

(Without the word "towards? Hihihihihi....) ;)

[ShoutGrace]

1 also to·wards /'tO-&rdz, 'to(-&)rdz/


to‧ward  /prep. tɔrd, toʊrd, təˈwɔrd, twɔrd, twoʊrd; adj. tɔrd, toʊrd/ Pronunciation Key - Show Spelled Pronunciation[prep. tawrd, tohrd, tuh-wawrd, twawrd, twohrd; adj. tawrd,


PRONUNCIATION: tôrdz, trdz, t-wôrdz


1.) Do you have speakers so you can listen to both?

2.) Even given the fact that 'towards' is necessarily pronounced with two syllables, which it clearly is not, it isn't considered very polite to point these things out - I've finished several haikus that had syllabic discrepancies.

I do thank you for your concern.

I'm going to repost my haiku here:


They charge with vigor -
Running towards their lives so fast,
Then trip, crawl towards graves.

[dramasnot6]

oooo nice haiku, creative take on mine:D

Then trip, crawl towards graves.
Those foxholes, forever deep
Muskets like shovels

[Laindessiel]

Oh, okay. Please don't get mad. I know you are a Haiku Great, I've read your entries and Toni likes you a lot.

I "corrected" your entry because I "thought" that it was wrong and so we can't continue doing it if it remains that way. I "just thought" that it was wrong, alright? Please don't get mad.

I've listened to the word and it was pronounced like "TOH-wards" when I first heard it but "tords" when I thought about the word contains just 1 syllable. And I live in Asia so there are pronunciation differences in this part of the world as compared in the West. But now I realized that IT is "TAWRDS".

Right. I hope everything is settled and I hope you are not mad at me. The correcting thing is second nature to me because I'm the eldest in the family and my siblings are recipients of it.

Haiku entry:

Then trip, crawl towards graves.
Begging for a man's pity
For her little err.

[RobinHood3000]

For her little err,
Soldiers seek to bury her
Muskets like shovels.


I enjoy these little mix-ups. Makes for an interesting challenge.

[Pensive]

Muskets like shovels
Placed on my red table
Look not really good.

[toni]

Looks not really good
When Rainbowed lies and Romance
Recline side by side

Hello, dear Pensy!:lol: