The distance between us is like
you are a river,
and I'm a cloud.
When you flow into the open arms
of the ocean,
all I can do is
adore your sweet gurgle
over a little pebble!
The distance between us
The distance between us is like
you are a river,
and I'm a cloud.
When you flow into the open arms
of the ocean,
all I can do is
adore your sweet gurgle
over a little pebble!
Last edited by angliholic; 08-31-2010 at 02:38 PM.
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I just do not know how you keep producing these gorgeous little love-poems, I really don't! The contrast between the cloud and the river is so stark, and I wonder if it contrasts emotions? That's anothe reason I love your work, it doesn't hit you in the face, it sneaks in to the psyche. Beautiful!
Dafydd Manton, A Legend In His Own Lunchtime!!www.dafydd-manton.co.uk
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What lovely, imaginative tenderness!
lovely childlike gurgliness
For those who believe,
no explanation is necessary.
For those who do not,
none will suffice.
it sounds like an ode to a beautiful child.
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Thanks, Dafydd, for the gorgeous feedback.Originally Posted by dafydd manton
The contrast between a cloud and a river is the distance between me and my sweet little one! They could imply emotions!
The classic Chinese poems never hit readers in the face;
they just sneak in to their psyche and heart as you said!
Thanks, Prince, for your lovely feedback!
Thanks, Jerry, for the childlike feedback.
It mirrors your childlike heart!
Thanks, Delta, for your comment!
When my scribbling is done and presented here, it's open to interpretation
though I didn't mean the way you thought!
Anyway, I'm gland that you have a beautiful childlike heart reflected from your comment!
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Wow Wow Wow..... just have no words for this one....What a poem....This one is most beautiful and I love the description of the ocean receiving the river with open arms..... Though I am young, my little hat is off to you.....you are a genuine poet!
Regards!
Thanks, Adi, for your wow comment!
Though you're young in age, but I think you're learned and know how to appreciate poems better than I do!
My thumbs' up to you!
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