I love the concept here--the yin/yang--but I think the entire 3rd stanza is weak. There's the "mighted" problem, and the distractingly predictable love/dove rhyme.
I love the concept here--the yin/yang--but I think the entire 3rd stanza is weak. There's the "mighted" problem, and the distractingly predictable love/dove rhyme.
"I get up every morning determined to both change the world and have one hell of a good time. Sometimes this makes planning my day difficult."
~E.B. White
I've been getting that a lot...hmm...Originally Posted by _Shannon_
is it just the last two lines of the third stanza? Or the whole thing? I may have to take this one into a work in progress...
Find your dream and stick with it...or your life will have slipped past in a whisper with you still on the bottom.
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