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    Web Of Weakness

    I'm stuck in here.
    Inside this predicament.
    Caused by your anger.
    Fuelled by my pain.
    All joy of today has vacated.
    It wont come back tomorrow.
    You'll lash out.
    Take his side.
    Without remorse.

    Twist the events, the words.
    To suit your argument.
    But congratulations.
    For you've based yourself on deception, and deceit.
    You're an empty shell of your former personality.
    The reaon for your truth.
    Is a lie.
    It's non-existant.

    And neither are you.

    Inside a web of your own mistakes, you're caught.
    The more you garner fury, and be so self-righteous.
    The web becomes thicker.
    You get pulled deeper.

    And as you go down, so my life goes up.
    Up in flames that torment unconsolably.
    So one day ends, with anger, hate gone from your side.
    Come tomorrow, and once again in your heart it resides.
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    Another rant/poem, sorry :P
    Just letting out my frustration.
    Maybe eventually I'll put a real poem up.

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    Yeah, I was going to say this sounds more like a rant than a poem. Sometimes that's what we need to do; but to make it interesting for others you might find a more poetic voice to frame your rant in.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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    call it pranting! I can relate

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    Quote Originally Posted by MorpheusSandman View Post
    Yeah, I was going to say this sounds more like a rant than a poem. Sometimes that's what we need to do; but to make it interesting for others you might find a more poetic voice to frame your rant in.
    Thanks for the help! Tis much appreciated.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Delta40 View Post
    call it pranting! I can relate
    Haha! Pranting it is then.

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