Picture Poetry Contest (...continued...)

[dramasnot6]

Congratulations Motherhubbard!!! It was a wonderful poem!

A very interesting picture...I will get to thinking about it right away.
Thanks for the feedback Fifth!

[dramasnot6]

Go Pen and Downing!!

[PrinceMyshkin]

These hands have found a home
in one another after plaster, lathe,
brick and the malleable stuff
of which the human heart is made
have failed her.

We go from hand to hand
seeking comfort and refuge
in love, in comradeship, in the hands
of the Creator but, one by one,
each refuge crumbles or is sacked.

The hands that held us, warm
and safe, let go, until we fall, at last,
into our own hands’ clasp.

[CdnReader]

^^^ This is so beautiful, Jerry. I love it.

[Sweets America]

These hands have found a home
in one another after plaster, lathe,
brick and the malleable stuff
of which the human heart is made
have failed her.

We go from hand to hand
seeking comfort and refuge
in love, in comradeship, in the hands
of the Creator but, one by one,
each refuge crumbles or is sacked.

The hands that held us, warm
and safe, let go, until we fall, at last,
into our own hands’ clasp.

I love it so much!!

[mazHur]

Dreams and Desires
by mazHur

Most of my dreams and desires,
the covetings of my heart,
my aspirations, my yearnings
seem to have been fulfilled,
yet thousands of them still smoulder
in the hearth of my heart
yet unfulfilled;
Ah, the mere inkling of these unearned wishes
pulls my heart apart;
each wish being sufficient enough
to make me feel like dying;
Like a heart full of a myriad of desires
yet to be fulfilled,
A victim of the brutal hands of time,
Here I sit with my fingers crossed.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Dreams and Desires
by mazHur

Most of my dreams and desires,
the covetings of my heart,
my aspirations, my yearnings
seem to have been fulfilled,
yet thousands of them still smoulder
in the hearth of my heart
yet unfulfilled;
Ah, the mere inkling of these unearned wishes
pulls my heart apart;
each wish being sufficient enough
to make me feel like dying;
Like a heart full of a myriad of desires
yet to be fulfilled,
A victim of the brutal hands of time,
Here I sit with my fingers crossed.

This is magnificent, Mazhur, that rush of great, heartfelt images, ending with the bare simplicity of that last line!

[NickAdams]

Their skin,
the film of a cooled winter’s drink,
holds the night
in its tactile paving.

-How often do we
come together?
-When was the last
Time?

-Minutes, hours, days,
Moments?

-We were younger then:
Minutes, hours, days,
Moments
Younger.

Their fingertips,
Ten cliffs;
A shell-bed apiece,
for five knolls to rest.

-How often did we
come together?
-When will be the last
Time?

-Minutes, hours, days,
Moments?

-We will be older then:
Minutes, hours, days,
Moments
Older.

-We will have come together ...
One last
Time.

[mazHur]

This is magnificent, Mazhur, that rush of great, heartfelt images, ending with the bare simplicity of that last line!

Prince, am glad you liked the poem; a bundle of thanks for your most valued and generous comments which I sincerely appreciate

[PrinceMyshkin]

Their skin,
the film of a cooled winter’s drink,
holds the night
in its tactile paving.

-How often do we
come together?
-When was the last
Time?

-Minutes, hours, days,
Moments?

-We were younger then:
Minutes, hours, days,
Moments
Younger.

Their fingertips,
Ten cliffs;
A shell-bed apiece,
for five knolls to rest.

-How often did we
come together?
-When will be the last
Time?

-Minutes, hours, days,
Moments?

-We will be older then:
Minutes, hours, days,
Moments
Older.

-We will have come together ...
One last
Time.

How delicate! And how wonderfully effective is your repetition of

-How often do we
come together?
-When was the last
Time?

-Minutes, hours, days,
Moments?

-We were younger then:
Minutes, hours, days,
Moments
Younger.

[motherhubbard]

Well, Prince- are you going to write one?

It looks like we have a lot of really great entries. Who thinks I should go ahead and set a deadline?

[dramasnot6]

I have one I need to edit- but I am going to California for a few days, so if it is not too much trouble please set the deadline later than a week from now mothehubbard. Thank you!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Well, Prince- are you going to write one?

Hunh? What the heck are you talking about? See message 424!

[motherhubbard]

Hunh? What the heck are you talking about? See message 424!

Good grief! HOW EMBARRISING. I just keep seeing your name with all of the other poems and thinking I don’t know what. I totally remember and don’t know what came over me. AND I had taken A LOT of various pain medication- I’m spending this morning going back over what I posted both here and for my homework and you are not my only regret of the day. I’m so sorry Jerry. SO TOTALLY SORRY!!!

[NickAdams]

How delicate! And how wonderfully effective is your repetition of ...

Thanks. I almost stayed out of this round, because of the strong entries, yours being one of the strongest.