Wow, thanks, Sleepy. I honestly didn't expect my story to get so much attention.
You're very right about David being a jerk, which is what I meant him to be, by and large. I wanted him to have a little of the reader's sympathy (in the sense that they can relate to some of the things he feels), but of course, not all of it. And yes, you're correct about the reason why the police arrested him.
I wanted the story to convey the perspective of a David humbled and changed by what happened. I saw him as mostly pulled down to earth by the experience, as opposed to his somewhat carefree paradigm before it. He's as much bewildered by Eve's suicide as the reader. I admit, I probably should have made Eve's suicide a little more logical, but then, suicide is a hard act to rationalize in a lot of circumstances. Back to David, I saw him as being a little bitter about how he was treated by the authorities, but more fatalistic and hopeless about it than anything else.
Still, to be totally honest, I was just trying for a different tone than what I was used to. I wanted to write something dark for a change. ~shrug~Anyway, thanks for giving my story a second read, I really do love the feedback.
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Originally Posted by RobinHood3000
), but sometimes it takes me a while because I tend to be rather busy during term.
Probably the title sensitizes the reader to that aspect, even if there aren't many heavy hints in the story itself
