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    It’s written, printed and filmed
    By those second man;
    I woke up in their dream,
    In their terminable thought,
    And in their intricate expression.
    It’s signed, plated and carried
    By the third man;
    I lived in their hope,
    In their traceable opinion,
    And their illumined version.
    It’s geared, framed and shown
    By the fourth man;
    I am the time on their watch;
    It goes on ticking slowly,
    And they reveal themselves-
    As my creators,
    For here I seek a dead space,
    As their watches have expired.


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    Beautiful poem!

    I was born as a poet in this forum
    That is so sweet! We're proud of you!
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
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    To be completely honest, this poem is beyond me, if you could explain the message here it would be appreciated. It seems complex and kiz seems to understand yet I am left in the dark.
    “Deny death, and you deny life.” —Tales From Earthsea (2006)

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    Beautiful poem!

    That is so sweet! We're proud of you!
    Thank you Kiz <3

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ganthradorius View Post
    To be completely honest, this poem is beyond me, if you could explain the message here it would be appreciated. It seems complex and kiz seems to understand yet I am left in the dark.
    Hello Ganthradorius! Thank you for your comment. What I mainly meant was that how we are controlled by powerful people, how we are just some puppets in their hand. They have our ropes, they move us, we move. Its almost like they are controlling us.
    I wrote this poem when I was clinically depressed and troubled and believed that I was in a dysfunctional relationship. I felt that some close people were controlling me and I had no control over that.
    I hope it's a little bit clear to you. If not, please let me know. But thank you so much for your comment.

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