Congrats b/v!
Congrats b/v!
Thank you Dieter - merci beaucoup mon petit chou - but then, I always knew you were a man of impeccable taste and judgement!And I hope you have / had a wonderful Christmas with your family (whenever you read this next). And thanks also, Hawk; for what it's worth, I thought your poem offered the most interesting take on the subject.
Anyway, enough of the shameless flattery. I'm sure people have got better things to do over the festive period, but here's a subject and deadline for the next round of the competition; hopefully it gives people enough time to enter. I'll be looking for poems that use language and form inventively; that are concise and condensed. Thanks again, b|v.
Subject: January
Deadline: Friday, 17th January, 2014 (midnight, GMT)
January
January and everything
starting again
soon spring
and flowers
and babies
and hope
and empty summer
and Christmas
and dying
and everything
starting again
January Morning
The sycamore alone, bare, skeletal,
The ruby-throated quiet, the black-chinned gone,
The streets, the grey pavements, the park empty,
The baby blue eyes, the poppies next spring,
I wander around covered thick, still cold.
Last edited by miyako73; 12-30-2013 at 02:55 PM.
"You laugh at me because I'm different, I laugh at you because you're all the same."
--Jonathan Davis
January 2014
Snow.
Tons.
Wet.
Heavy.
Trees,
Pylons
Breaking.
Power failure.
OH!
That
Was
Last
Year.
Now:
GREY.
O schaurig ists übers Moor zu gehn,
wenn es wimmelt vom Heiderauche,
sich wie Phantome die Dünste drehn
und die Ranke häkelt am Strauche.
Annette von Droste-Hülshoff (1797 - 1843) (see avatar) Der Knabe im Moor/The Lad in the Moor
January begins a new year
Things seldom change
Same old crap, 2014
What the hell
Bring it on...
Pendragon (C) January 2, 2014
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Brrr! Such fear!
Spring is near.
Some folks prefer to race.
Patiently,
Watch winter flee
Gently from your face.
To start again,
And leave all that
Behind us,
And face the front,
Like January does,
Ah, I wish...
ay up
January
the blues loose
a clearance of moods
light appears least
hurried to break feast
let spring takes its lease
winter is needs to nature and east.
Last edited by cacian; 01-18-2014 at 09:29 AM.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
bump
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Right, time’s up! Thanks for all the entries.
I enjoyed the circular nature (in both senses) of windblown’s ‘January’, which put me in mind of Wallace Stevens's ‘Domination of Black’; cacian submitted a characteristically rhyme-heavy offering; and barbara, Pendragon, YesNo, and prendrelemick all had a similar theme of January as being a time of looking forward. If I’m honest, I would have liked more focus on January itself - what it is rather than what it’s not - and of course, named after the two-faced Roman god, Janus, January looks simultaneously backwards and forwards.
But I feel the best of the bunch is Miyako’s ‘January Morning’. I was particularly taken with the second line, which showed some linguistic invention; the adjectival phrases lacking nouns are nicely suggestive of the absence felt during winter. Nice touch. Personally, I feel the poem could be tightened even further considering it’s a minimalist poem (do you need any of the definite articles? Three adjectives in the opening line!?) but overall, I think it has the edge over the other entries.
Well done, everyone. Over to you, Miyako…
blank I verse thank you
Miyako well done !!!
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Thanks Blank and Cacian. My apology, blank--I just realized now I was in the minimalist not in the subject contest. Too much coffee and smoking. Give me till the end of the day to think of a subject/theme.
"You laugh at me because I'm different, I laugh at you because you're all the same."
--Jonathan Davis
Okay, here it is:
cacophony
"a harsh, discordant mixture of sounds"
For added challenge, your poems should minimize, tone down, lower, calm, still, deaden, stop, mute, or silence
those harsh sounds, discordant voices, noises, shouts, or whatever bother your ears and your sense of serenity.
Deadline:
February 16, 2014
Before 12 midnight of Sunday
"You laugh at me because I'm different, I laugh at you because you're all the same."
--Jonathan Davis
hi miyako may I suggest a new addition to these contests?Originally Posted by miyako73
how about you write something to give us an idea. I think it would be interesting to exemplify the contest. in other words anyone who gets a turn at starting a contest should write a piece themselves to lead by example.
what do you think?
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
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