Niamhs poems

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Originally Posted by firefangled

Niamh, you poem without a title is moving. Sometimes you have to let it be for awhile to come up with an appropriate title. I like your poems and their titles. You will think of this one as well.

Keep writing!

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Thanks fire! Dont you worry! as long as i keep feeling, i'll keep writing!

the last line of this last poem is ultra-cool :thumbs_up

Thanks Symphony!:blush: I throw in the last two lines when i was typing it up.

lol those hurried additions make a poem so much more enjoyable to read, funny how they become, at times, the very essence of a poem! happens too often :D .

:lol: I know! It happens way too often for me. Its always the lines that people tell me they really liked. Maybe its the last bit of passion you unleash into the poem and thats why it brings it together!

lol same goes for me.
i remember once when i wrote a bengali poem and kept it unfinished, i added a 2-line closing to it later when showing it to some friends, and those 2 lines were more appreciated than the whole poem! so much to sharp add-ons!!

:brow: You said it! You spend ages getting the other lines sorted and then lash a couple down and wham, they are the favs. A well i suppose that once they like it thats all that should matter!

not what we can call justice to the other lines though :D
but still yeah i suppose all that matters is ppl liking them. after all, the add-ons are but our creation as well so... :lol:

Hi, your poems are good. you are too much philosophical....!!!


Corruption is nothing but the beginning,
Destruction middle, loss the end.
And with a band of heralds singing,
God his Angels shall he send.

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Originally Posted by Nagaraja_Madego

Hi, your poems are good. you are too much philosophical....!!!


Corruption is nothing but the beginning,
Destruction middle, loss the end.
And with a band of heralds singing,
God his Angels shall he send.

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Thanks Nagaraja. Welcome to Litnet! Hope you have fun around the forum!:wave:

As i lie down to rest
my head is filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubled past.
Sometimes eyes glisten,
tears forming on surface fighting for release.
Darkness overcomes,
And as i lie dreaming
My dreams are filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubled past.

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Originally Posted by Niamh

As i lie down to rest
my head is filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubles past.
Sometimes eyes glisten,
tears forming on surface fighting for release.
Darkness overcomes,
And as i lie dreaming
My dreams are filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubles past.

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Short and fine! :)

But I think of future emotions and 'troubled' past would look better than of future emotions and 'troubles' past.

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Originally Posted by Pensive

Short and fine! :)

But I think of future emotions and 'troubled' past would look better than of future emotions and 'troubles' past.

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done.

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Originally Posted by Niamh

As i lie down to rest
my head is filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubled past.
Sometimes eyes glisten,
tears forming on surface fighting for release.
Darkness overcomes,
And as i lie dreaming
My dreams are filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubled past.

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Good one :thumbs_up

thanks symphony!