I love the concept here--the yin/yang--but I think the entire 3rd stanza is weak. There's the "mighted" problem, and the distractingly predictable love/dove rhyme.
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I love the concept here--the yin/yang--but I think the entire 3rd stanza is weak. There's the "mighted" problem, and the distractingly predictable love/dove rhyme.
I've been getting that a lot...hmm...Quote:
Originally Posted by _Shannon_
is it just the last two lines of the third stanza? Or the whole thing? I may have to take this one into a work in progress...