The lamb from police
ran came back to Mary (like the nursery song, "Mary had a little lamb")
They were both happy!
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The lamb from police
ran came back to Mary (like the nursery song, "Mary had a little lamb")
They were both happy!
The Lamb from police
Ate away all the sweet grass,
In the calm meadows.
In the calm meadows
Murder, every day is done
On one by the other
on one by the otherQuote:
Originally Posted by Bluemauvey
until sin's forebodement's come
havoc unsets peace
Havoc unsets peace,
That fragmentary concept,
Shaking like jelly
Shaking like jelly—
Nerves can raise more havoc than a
Madman with chainsaw
Madman with chainsaw
Wants to meet like minded girl
For cosy nights in
For cosy nights in
Light the fire, sit back, relax;
Soft flames mesmerize.
Isn't cosy spelled with a z? like cozy?
Soft flames mesmerize,
easily flashing eyes of
a nighmare childhood.
A nightmare childhood
still holds each ticking moment
a vision shattered
a vision shattered,
because chucky might be in
the closet waiting
'The closet waiting'
The autobiography
Of Graham Le Saux
Of Graham Le Saux...
whom I've never heard of in
my short, stunted, life.
my short, stunted life,
crashed on rocks nearing demise,
until angels cry
Until angels cry
I suppose I will just have
To make someone else
to make someone else,
iron my obese wife's clothes,
stuff the hole in Holland's wall with a hose,
and poke at my nose..
went off the Haiku, there, 'Dole...
to make someone else
was Frankenstein's new problem—
made him too frightened...
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made him too frightened
to search for a date for the
Halloween school dance.
halloween school of dance
where all hippy idiots
show their suits and prance
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Show their suits and prance
That's how bad poker players
Give away the game
give away the game
human greed offers no defence
gives the game a way
gives the game a way,
mah jong by local transit-
globalization
globalization:
a means to buy goods cheap and
increase one's net worth
increase one's net worth
to keep racking up the points
one deed at a time
One deed at a time
Thus goes the will writers day
Death by paper cuts
death by paper cuts;
slow and torturous as death
by simply living
By simply living
The poor subsistence farmer
Is the rich man's Yang
Is the rich man's Yang
worth more than poor woman's Yin?
Light and Shadow, friends.
Light and Shadow, friends
murmers low into the night
a lone owl shivers
A lone owl shivers
All of the rodent world hears
Bad news gets around
Bad news gets around—
Gossips’ sunburned tongues wagging—
Yakking nothing good…
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I don't get your structures Pen, 5, 6, 6?
:-(
I usually let people go who miscount syllables, Mauvey, unless it's very outrageous, but perhaps the re-write is better?Quote:
Originally Posted by Bluemauvey
Bad news gets around—
Gossips’ sunburned tongues wagging—
Yakking nothing good…
http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l1...lies/snake.gif
Yakking nothing good—
Criticism of everyone—
Burning the phone lines…
Burning the phone lines—
Gossip about the neighbors—
Just call the Newspapers!
Just call the Newspapers—
The National Enquirer—
All they print is lies…
All they print is lies—
One slanderer slanders others
Vicious circle ends
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I do prefer the re-write. And I do like the smarts of your submissions in general.Quote:
Originally Posted by Pendragon
I don't count out of pedantry, I just use the previous Haiku above the one I'm composing to measure the metre, that's how I notice. :thumbs_up
vicious circle ends
only to begin again
a faltering trend
a faltering trend
grows to a quake, shaking my
living soul of boots
living soul of boots,
Brittle reminder; lost steps,
Mud dried battefields.
mud dried battlefields
spring daisy-hope from bloodspill,
summer dries the rain
summer dries the rain;
and blood-curdling voices of
anguish rise in air