Lovley P, as always. I particularly like this one though.
Pompeii life now stilled
Ashen walls and earthly time
still as gentle rain
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Lovley P, as always. I particularly like this one though.
Pompeii life now stilled
Ashen walls and earthly time
still as gentle rain
Still as gentle rain
they await the dawn of fear
army passing by
PS: P - I was referring to your poem and not mine last time...sounded confusing...last sentence.
Thanks Janine (I got it ;)). I like yours too.
Army passing by
Beautiful young men passing
Away far from home.
Away, far from home
Is where his two feet takes him.
Don't know where to go.
Don't know where to go
Now that I have gone this far
Endless possibilities
Endless possibilities
Endless musical passion
Endless dreams and hopes
Hey Shougrace, I'm being a good girl...
Endless dreams and hopes
Thwarted now in memory
Trapped beyond time alone
Endless dreams and hopes
Aspirations of fooled youth
Crushed with middle age
Uh, whom shall I follow?
haha, my mom read my last one and said, with a very grim face, "was i the inspiration?"
Oh, so sorry Janine and Laind!
Well, I think you messed up - you used my first line and not my last line. I will go from here using your last line since I am middle-agedQuote:
Originally Posted by dramasnot6
Crushed with middle age
She bend to her endless woe
Alone and forlorn
oh, no i didnt accidentally use your first line. we must have been creating our haikus simultaneously, and i posted a couple minutes later. i do that fairly often...i probably take way too much time writing one haiku that i dont press refresh to see if anyone has already written for that one. But thanks for keeping mine!!
Beautfil haiku by the way
Alone and forlorn
Left to scream at concrete walls
Feelings like a leech
Thanks for the compliment, and BTW I love your Avatar. I still can't decide on one. I think that has happened to me before on other threads - posting same time as someone else. I try to do the haiku spontaneously but I am slow too.
Feelings like a leech
I cling to the stem
Life circles round me
Nite all ...yawn.....fad i n g a w a y
correct me if I'm wrong, but I do think that last line is 6 syllabels.Quote:
Originally Posted by Janine
Anyway rock on
Life circles around me
Labeled ego speaks loudly
Thats so last season!
yea, it is 6. ah well, we all had messy syllables as begginers.
Thats so last season!
Shopaholic clarifies
But could i care less?
hehe...a felt like making one a bit blunt and unsophisticated for once
Yes indeed you are. :thumbs_up I'm so very proud. ;) :p Maybe a good way to do it would be just to copy and paste the instructions found on the first post in this thread?Quote:
Originally Posted by Laindessiel
But could I care less?
Not even if my friend was
Tickling my rib cage.
Hey ShoutGrace, you're here! :wave: Hello!:)
Tickling my rib cage
To force humour out of me
Defy gravity
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sorry, I am really a Haiku Failure Personified but I wanna say hello to ShoutGrace..:)
Quote:
Originally Posted by toni
"The only bad haiku is the one not written." ;) :D How are you toni?
Defy gravity
Lets get these space suits on and
Have some weightless sex.
I am fine, now that I saw me fwend.:D
Have some wightless sex
Some bottled wine and crupmets
Time will transport us
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Question! ShoutGrace's age is a mystery..
If you don't mind me asking,
Are you 20-ish 30-ish 40-ish or 50-ish?
It's not that I don't mind your asking, it's just that I don't like to think of myself as an "ish." :D
Time will transport us
Back to the dissolution
Of our former love.
Of our former love
So tragic I remember
spitting on dark holes
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LOL.
Okay, Im gonna ask again, are you in your twenties, thirties fourties or fifties?
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Your haikus are soo Romantic, you know..:)
Well, I try my best :) . . . I don't want to be tricky or anything, but I'm sure you can get a gist of my age from reading posts of mine. Maybe someday I'll tell you in a PM.
Spitting on dark holes
Watching the sun set over
The hulking sand dunes.
Someday? I wanna know now!:D Pm me!
The hulking sand dunes
I tread over nameless trees
Wishing you'd be here..
:D
Wishing you'd be here
Instead I find a lot of
Empty time and space.
Awww..:blush:
Empty time and space
I'll stumble, bleed just for you
I'll trade yesterday
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I am greatly inspired and influenced by shoutgrace's romanticism.:D
Quote:
Originally Posted by toni
I think that you are the kindest haiku'er ever. ;)
I'll trade yesterday
For a shot at what I think
We could be someday.
We could be someday.
Me and you against the world.
Let's go take walk now.
I think you're the most romantic haiku'er ever.Quote:
Originally Posted by ShoutGrace
Let's go take walk now
Or regret what only could be
A page in memory
Good morning,Uncle Virg!:D
Morning Toni. Or is evening by you?
Page in memory
can remembered with photos.
Not enough light here.
Not enough light here
All pale and gray
Senseless they sway.
It is evening here. :D Actually, I just had dinner. 8.30pm:pQuote:
Originally Posted by Virgil
Not enough light here
To hide my red fantasies
My coffee is cold
Hey morning/evening/everything to Virgil and Toni!!
Not enough light here
Henchmen open the shutters
Shadows steel bullets
darnnit....sorry toni, ill do a new one.
Hi Subby :wave: I haven't seen you around as much.
Senseless they sway
To the music of the band.
Young couple dancing.
oh, sub did one too. You msut feel like a very popular writer virgil.
okay, i can use both of your lines
Senseless they sway
Cant comprehend their own name
I will go to bed
Young couple dancing
Eyes overwhelmed with cliche
Mass produced roses
Mass produced roses
Sun illumines against me.
Tries to blink away!