this is fun but think I am pretty bad at it!
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this is fun but think I am pretty bad at it!
you skipped my haiku, its a continuation. but im glad youre getting the hang of it!Quote:
Originally Posted by Janine
here, ill repost mine
With mystery chow
Cerebral cows graze roughly
Teeth ache from thinking
oh and haiku rules go
5 syllables
7
then 5 again
and in this forum you begin with the last persons line
like with mine your first line will be Teeth ache from thinking
and the next person will start with your last line
Feel free to ask questions if youre still confused! And welcome!
Teeth ache from thinking
Back ache from loving to hard
Euphoric welts show
heya Janine, no worries Haiku took me a while to learn as well. You'll soon get the hang of it.
Don't forget the 5, 7, 5 syllabels
Euphoric welts show
I will wait here Like A Stone
Blind dreaming turned snow
Blind dreaming turned snow
Flecks of cream dot hooded lids
Waking and melting
Waking and melting
eye of curiosity
view beyond the wall
View beyond the wall
Black hearts weep like crawling stones
Death will march itself
Death will march itself
will happily tread towards us
with importance
Nice irony, dear Pensy..
Full of happiness
Whenever you see his face
Tides will swallow me
tides will swallow me
as I paint the commonplace
with importance (since Pensive's got skipped)
with importance (since Pensive's got skipped)
Loves not important
I drown myslef in the bath
I drown myself in the bath
Deceptions long past
Murderous time stalks
Getting better Janine. I like that last line.Quote:
Originally Posted by Janine
Murderous time stalks
The dark streets of Manhattan.
How will you save him?
Thanks dramasnot.
I've done this sort of thing on another forum, so I have lots of practice.
How will you save him
who wilts by helping fingers,
a stubborn flower?
a stubborn flower
petals of sinewy tone
and trampoline bounce
Thanks - maybe practice helps. That last line made a great first one. I like yours. Think I would like the "the" to be like "dank dark streets...something more rank would be better. Gee, now I am giving advice and I am still pretty lame in writing them myself! sorry :blush:Quote:
Originally Posted by Virgil
and trampoline bounce
balloons bursting in thin air
Circus comes to town!
Excellent!!!:thumbs_upQuote:
Originally Posted by Janine
Circus comes to town
And Boy decides to run off.
Perfect cannon ball.
Yay! Go Janine!!
Perfect cannon ball
Ships staring with thirsty gore
Pirates Tete a Tete
Pirates Tete a Tete
Swords sharpened gnawing sharks teeth
Fast fury begins
did I spell knawing wrong?
knawling? ....whoops! :blush:
gnawing. cool haiku, Janine!
fast fury begins
Christmas comes but once a year,
Consumerism.
haha, love your take on that one riesa!oh and i just discovered your cinquain thread and am having lots of fun with that.
Consumerism
Mosaic of screens pressure
Poor mans addiction
Poor man's addiction
is a snowy football game.
Touchdown is needed.
I love Riesa's haiku - just the way I am feeling right now...like Christmas....help! Consumerism, like a lurking wolf, invades all the stores!!! Thanks - did you really like my haiku? I did not think it made sense. I just changed the word "gnawing" - is that fair to do in the rules?
dramasnot6 I loved yours, too! Just got back from a store, so I can relate. The mosiac gave me a headache! Virgil - yours was so guyish. Is that a word?.... but I liked it. Not sure I can touch that last line but will try one anyway.
Touchdown is needed
All tension is magnified
Snowflakes on the hide
Yes, I liked it. Why would I say so if I didn't. I think you've got the hang of it now.
Snowflakes on the hide
Snout sinks into the snowbank.
Puppies love fresh snow.
Puppies love fresh snow.
Where has my little dog gone?
Into a white drift.
dogs are amazing
I love all of them always
golden retriever!
The wind I believe
is blowing towards the sea
from here away home
hm...last line doesn't quite make sense
Imagination
is my life blood and my soul
Oh, if i was free
Virgil - your haiku was so cute....then P followed with a sweet one, too. I went ....ahhh....
Virgil - no silly wolf, I was speaking to Riesa. I loved her "consumerism" Haiku. She like my haiku, she said.
Yes, I am having fun now and think I have the swing of it.
Into a white drift
The silver dove slowly swooned
A statue make white
Ops, someone broke the chain? I am still on "Into a white drift". We must have posted same time. What now?
I think i'm not too shabby at this "haiku"
please tell if i'm doing them wrong =D
one last poem...
To sleep i must fall
Mom's shrieks do affirm my thought
I bid you adieu
ok, there is no way i spelled adiue right =P
brainstorm, you did what I did in the beginning. You have to pick up the last line from last Haiku to start the new one you write. I just got the gist of it, too.
theres a chain? woops
my first time on the forums in 6 months, sorry lol
i'll check next time. you can continue with snow drift if u like, just ignore my haiku completley
They actually were very lovely haiku's. But the game is as I described in post above. I like the way you write. Stay in - it is so much fun!
stay in - it is fun!! I just wrote you a message and it did not post...wait I will rewrite it.
It just posted - sorry....just slow I suppose....
If I'm tracking this right I think I'm following Janine:
A statue made white
With the gentle falling ash
Pompeii life now stilled.