The distance between us is like
you are a river,
and I'm a cloud.
When you flow into the open arms
of the ocean,
all I can do is
adore your sweet gurgle
over a little pebble!
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The distance between us is like
you are a river,
and I'm a cloud.
When you flow into the open arms
of the ocean,
all I can do is
adore your sweet gurgle
over a little pebble!
I just do not know how you keep producing these gorgeous little love-poems, I really don't! The contrast between the cloud and the river is so stark, and I wonder if it contrasts emotions? That's anothe reason I love your work, it doesn't hit you in the face, it sneaks in to the psyche. Beautiful!
What lovely, imaginative tenderness!
lovely childlike gurgliness
it sounds like an ode to a beautiful child.
Thanks, Dafydd, for the gorgeous feedback.Quote:
Originally Posted by dafydd manton
The contrast between a cloud and a river is the distance between me and my sweet little one! They could imply emotions!
The classic Chinese poems never hit readers in the face;
they just sneak in to their psyche and heart as you said!
Thanks, Prince, for your lovely feedback!Quote:
Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin
Thanks, Jerry, for the childlike feedback.Quote:
Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy
It mirrors your childlike heart!
Thanks, Delta, for your comment!Quote:
Originally Posted by Delta40
When my scribbling is done and presented here, it's open to interpretation
though I didn't mean the way you thought!
Anyway, I'm gland that you have a beautiful childlike heart reflected from your comment!
Wow Wow Wow..... just have no words for this one....What a poem....This one is most beautiful and I love the description of the ocean receiving the river with open arms..... Though I am young, my little hat is off to you.....you are a genuine poet!
Regards!
Thanks, Adi, for your wow comment!Quote:
Originally Posted by adityasam
Though you're young in age, but I think you're learned and know how to appreciate poems better than I do!
My thumbs' up to you!