The Saddest Raindrops

[ShadowsCool]

The saddest raindrops that ever fell
Fell on your grave
As they lowered you away
Into the ground
Without the sound of even a bird.

And now the Mass after morning blue
They serenade on the horizon grey
With not much to say to a heavy heart
That gathers breath in the misty air
Grasping onto you were there.

[Buh4Bee]

Shadows- I remember your writing as being decadent or as my husband described it Baroque. This poem does not follow in this vein very much at all.

I liked these lines:

And now the Mass after morning blue
They serenade on the horizon grey
With not much to say to a heavy heart
That gathers breath in the misty air

[ShadowsCool]

Buh4Bee. I always find it hard to write for an audience. I'm basically known for my love poems. I have written many poems in the last few months and I hope to post some better one's. Thanks for your reply!

[Haunted]

Poignant and heartfelt, and such a tender eloquence in the opening stanza. I think you connected quite well with your audience here.

[ShadowsCool]

Thank you Haunted.

[Twota]

I like it lots. :D It has been a while, glad to see you. ^^

[ShadowsCool]

Twota, nice to be back posting again. It's good to be reading your stuff too.

I like it lots. :D It has been a while, glad to see you. ^^

[Delta40]

I like S2 much better Shadows although the closing line is a little bumpy but overall very poignant.

[firefangled]

This is very lovely. I like the way it picks up rhyme to enhance the tone. Should there be a period after bird, since L1 S2 seems to continue that thought; and if so, perhaps a period after blue?

I like the last line; though it is awkward, it seems to work in its favor.

Nicely done.

[ShadowsCool]

Thank you Delta. You had to know, the last line gave me fits. I tried and tried and fiddled around with it for hours, but nothing came up that was better. I'll have to look at it again.

Firefangled: Yea perhaps, though I never thought of it with a period. I'll need to re-read it again. Thanks for commenting.