Spiritual Marriage

[ShadowsCool]

To a thought the mind reacted
To a place revealing that secret
A purple tone hidden from sensory
A friendly heart to follow in spirit.

To a revelation the mind opens
In of want hoping for fulfillment
A spirit dances and opens the door
A friendly soul for one adore.

It's where all things lie that need to be recalled,
It's reassurance being alone can't give,
It's a love awaiting marriage,
It's a bride awaiting her groom.

When he comes her heart delights.

[Delta40]

I like the journey from thought to marriage, however I think the beginning of each line, repetitive in its way doesn't do the poem justice. I think rather than a step by step approach, try allowing each line to flow into the next like a stream.

[ShadowsCool]

Seems to be my repetitive nature. Thanks Delta

Shadows

[Bar22do]

Have enjoyed the progression, but like Delta was distracted by the repetitive and a bit old fashioned style in this.

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed your poem.

Your poem is substantial in character; you have much here to build upon.

Your poem also touched me very much as I've written a few small/short offerings regarding spiritual marriage from my point of view.

What spoke to me from your poem was of responding to: the promptings of the Spirit/revelation/a still small voice, a comforter, a true intelligence; that can help guide one towards spiritual marriage, and so much more (my mind is awash in feelings to expound and elucidate - but this is not the forum to do so; "O That I were an angel,..." (sigh)).

I hope you stay with this poem and am interested to see how it develops.

Sincerely,
tailor STATELY

[ucello]

Like tStately, I too was touched by your poem, while I believe it needs some tweating. Spiritual union, a high aiming objective.