The Outer Realm

[ShadowsCool]

-The Outer Realm-

From before consciousness
We enter a realm of an interesting dilemma,
The beginning of existence,
The existence before nothing;
The deep nebula
Beyond the grasp of our imagination,
The realm behind the curtain.
For we are so far out of our minds
To grasp what there we find
We become blind to the faintest light
That lies in the deep,
Beyond our intellect, beyond our selves
To the realm of God,
We cannot see
But hear and feel.

[Buh4Bee]

Of all your poems, I think this one is your strongest. It is clear and written with conviction and commandment.

You may want to break this into stanzas, because it starts to run into itself towards the end. The line breaks might give the reader pause and allow the moment to be absorbed in a more controlled way. The pacing of the reading will allow the reader to slow down and digest your message in a more enjoyable fashion.

[ShadowsCool]

Jersea,

I will consider that. And thanks for commenting. I actually have many poems but have only posted a few. This is one of my newer poems that was a bit difficult to write. My poems tend to run fast. I will take to heart what you just said.

Shadows

[Buh4Bee]

If your poems tend to run fast than your voice is prevalent. Well, this may be your writing style.