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Delta40
03-11-2011, 07:13 PM
She was a butterball of fat,
bulging with distended love.
He dove in and waded
through mountainous spongey flesh.
Her jelly-belly wobbled
as he splashed about like a child
in a paddling pool.
He parted her meaty breasts
so they spilled across her flabby arms.
He bent down and inhaled the bouquet
of her perspiring cleavage,
and then coated his face in the glistening slime.
He slipped his eager hands along her
lard-like thighs and groaned
as they melted at his probing touch.
Like a gourmet devotee,
he licked the roly-poly
sweaty seepage that exuded along
every by-way and drain
leaving trails of saliva
that revealed his own gross story.
Her fungal ooze lovingly lapped it up.
His fulfillment,
her pleasure.
He separated each furrow
fold by fold
to unearth deeper mud moats.
He flourished in the sticky trenches,
where he buried his odorous face.
She sighed, cleansed by his attention,
while he drowned in ponderous lust.

Jerrybaldy
03-11-2011, 07:18 PM
Blimey. I smell self deprication. Beautifully done Delta. Fearless and bloody brilliant.

Delta40
03-11-2011, 10:23 PM
This is not about me but thank you for the thought....

Delta40
03-12-2011, 05:22 PM
is this a bad poem or is its content just too repulsive?

firefangled
03-12-2011, 05:52 PM
is this a bad poem or is its content just too repulsive?

Who's to say a poem can't be repulsive and good. Your poem actually shows us that pleasure is in the senses of the willing participants.

I say judge not and ye shall not be judged.

It reminds me of a verse from a Louden Wainwright song called Winter Song:


If spring's a maid, then summer is a whore
Mosquito's bite,diving boards they throb
She's hot she's heavy hairy men they sweat
Gobble yellow corn upon the cob

PrinceMyshkin
03-13-2011, 11:08 AM
is this a bad poem or is its content just too repulsive?


Is truth to be avoided when or if it is painful to look at? This was done with great, non-judgmental observation.

Delta40
03-13-2011, 05:26 PM
Thanks Fire and Prince. I suppose it is difficult to enjoy poetry that makes one wince, even if it is painful and true.

deryk
03-13-2011, 06:00 PM
This made me laugh with delight. The density of hyperbolic words depicting fat, and even going as far as "slimy" and "ooze" sort of invert the senses. I don't think it's repugnant in the slightest but maybe a bit silly. A fair trade-off, I think. It's all funny and raunchy, but not at all disturbing. Well done.

Delta40
03-13-2011, 06:16 PM
That is a nice perspective Deryk. Sometimes one can get to embedded in the serious without realising the tacit ludicrousness of what we are writing. It is funny really. Here, force feed me a bigmac with heavy mayo (lol)

Haunted
03-13-2011, 06:18 PM
Of course this is a good poem Delta. I don't think you are capable of writing a bad poem. The more disgusting you make it, the more skills it takes. Anyhoo your poem convinced me to step up my workouts.

deryk
03-13-2011, 06:18 PM
Here, force feed me a bigmac with heavy mayo (lol)

I just hurt myself laughing.

Delta40
03-13-2011, 06:23 PM
as long as you wash it down with a diet, diet coke, I won't feel so bad!!!! LMAO

deryk
03-14-2011, 10:21 AM
as long as you wash it down with a diet, diet coke, I won't feel so bad!!!! LMAO

Have it your way (wait, that might be Burger King). Bon appetit! :p