Free

[JackieGinger]

What do you think?


Free

In the end freedom is to say words
To yourself
Into a bottle
You
Free to listen
Free not to care

Freedom is to dream of yourself
Only acting
Putting your madness
On your scene

Free

to read a book
and not to like it
to write a poem
a happy poem
but why do so?

Free

To love
To care
But why?
It is harmful
But you are free
To protest!

[rabid reader]

I love how simplistic it reads, delving into such a convoluted topic one is often lost in explanation. I love how it joyfully embraces the frivolity of freedom.

[Jesterhead]

I liked the meaning of this, freedom of speech where you are free to feel, say and do whatever you want.

the 'free' in between verses adds to the message of the poem. well done!

[MorpheusSandman]

The structure is interesting with its fragmented lines of short, free verse. I'd recommend paring down the repetition of the word free/dom. Since it's in the title it's better to leave it to the reader to intuit how freedom relates to the words. I think it would be much stronger as something like:

"In the end
To say words
To yourself
Into a bottle
You
to listen
not to care

To dream of yourself
Only acting
Putting your madness
On your scene

to read a book
and not to like it
to write a poem
a happy poem
but why do so?

To love
To care
But why?
It is harmful
But you are free
To protest!"

[JackieGinger]

Thank you all for your comments!


The structure is interesting with its fragmented lines of short, free verse. I'd recommend paring down the repetition of the word free/dom. Since it's in the title it's better to leave it to the reader to intuit how freedom relates to the words.

I think this is a good idea, pity it did not come from me! Although it would change the meaning of the poem a lot... Still, I do really like it!