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ur_shadow89
01-24-2010, 08:40 AM
I’ve anticipated for this to come
The parting of the heart
The silence of the mind.

Utter not a word of defense
Dismayed with your imperfection
You’ve tarnish my pure intention.

I’ve given my soul
I’ve offered my all
I was left with nothing but you.

But as we part
In silence and tears
I’d rather leave without saying goodbye.

MorpheusSandman
01-25-2010, 01:16 AM
It's very simple, almost artless, but it does capture the pain of breaking of. I might suggest adding more context and maybe being a little less direct. There has been so much poetry written about breaking up that when I try to write poetry about it I either descend into obscure metaphors or digressions about things that typically aren't associated with breakups.

Dinkleberry2010
01-25-2010, 11:20 AM
bumped because this poem deserves to be read