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paperleaves
12-20-2009, 02:15 AM
emulsified, the symmetry
of the lines that offset you from me
are lain askew in willow caskets searching for
the bust and build of God's solace.
my veins are on fire, as if
blood was a viscous solution, permeating
each vessel with no means to an end.
topical affection, a pledge with perforated boundaries
an umbilical sneeze interrupts the
howl of cackling angels
dancing in the silhouettes of every sinner's guilt
and I lay half-naked in bed, hoping that some day they'll smite me
for the heathen I am, and always will be
in this pallor, this wide-eyed stupor, this
inexplicable dream
devastating the crowds beyond worth and watching the
moment relived a thousand times, the sands may change
but the altar will survive


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394


it's freezing
and I'm swaddled in nothing but the warmth
of loneliness
and a teacup. goddamn, you were beautiful,
like the relic of a Greek god, awaiting atonement
from my hands, and maybe my breasts, and maybe my lusts
and all I wanted to do was lay
quietly in bed with you.
all I wanted
was to make you breakfast in bed and brew you black coffee
because you always seemed to like things bitter
and draw out your reservations
like apprehensive snakes in the deep recesses of your mind.
more than anything, I want to show you my birthmarks, my freckles, my dimples
and introduce you to my imperfections
so that someday you might trust me enough to explicate
everything that scares the f*** out of you

MorpheusSandman
12-20-2009, 03:56 AM
Damn these are both amazing and really reminded me of why I fell in love with your artistry, paper. 393 is you being your brilliantly beautiful, arcanely evocative self. 394 is a wonderful combination of that mystery with a more direct soberness that makes it all the more powerful. I read 393 twice and 394 three times... it makes me want to go write something now!

Bar22do
12-20-2009, 10:31 AM
Both your poems are so very genuine and great, with sadness and such sweet energy, yours very own... especially in 394... thanks to enabling me to sense the inner palaces of your being...

Buh4Bee
12-20-2009, 10:41 AM
Paper, Fabulous.

It makes me think of the sh8tty feelings we have after good sex and a desire for something more. I could be wrong, but that is what I thought of.

PrinceMyshkin
12-20-2009, 12:09 PM
I could have simply copy-pasted every word that Morpheus wrote, and I do endorse his comments. As usual, it's like blasphemy to isolate any few lines or images from your tsunami of brilliance, but these few


the sands may change
but the altar will survive


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394

and I'm swaddled in nothing but the warmth
of loneliness
and a teacup. goddamn, you were beautiful,

stand out for me. God bless your mind, your heart, your (alleged) imperfections!

paperleaves
12-20-2009, 12:29 PM
Morpheus: Thank you so much! I've had writer's block lately, and it took me longer than ever lastnight to spit out these poems and I'm so glad you enjoyed them. I can't believe you read them so many times! :)
Bar22do: Thank you as well! You really raised me up when you pronounced that I had "a sadness and sweet energy"...that is naturally a beautiful capability to have and I am so happy you see that in my works!
Jersea: That is PRECISELY the emotion I wanted to evoke! A yearning, an insatiable craving, a dream within a dream! Thank you for your (as always) wonderful comment!

And, last but not least, my dear Prince, "tsunami of brilliance"? It is an honor to hear those words from such a wise friend. :) I appreciate your words, I appreciate you, I appreciate everything you've done for me. Thank you!

MorpheusSandman
12-20-2009, 11:55 PM
I can't believe you read them so many times! I'm not just blowing smoke when I say I would buy any book you published of your poems.

paperleaves
12-21-2009, 01:54 AM
:D
Thanks, Morpheus!!!! I always tell my friends I'd rather get published after I have lived a long, full life, but secretly, I want to get published NOW. That would be so beautiful. All your comments keep me writing.

love
Kate

~Sophia~
12-21-2009, 07:24 PM
Brava paperleaves... such a painful bravado in these two poems. As always, you impress the hell out of me!