Just thinkin', I guess

[paperleaves]

I have been absent for a while (read my blog!) but this is all I could think of, over and over, for the past few hours.

enjoy, and let me know how you feel.


the lines are broken
but the glue is still wet
embers in raindrop formation the haunting parade
escapes every nightmare and sears through my bed
i burn with the fires of a million lost lights
that lit the rooms of strangers as they sinned and bled and cried
at the end of the eve, when we all close our eyes
we will see separate images, aligned in disguise
one night it could be death, the other,
opposite
but when we awaken, in sheets of sweet sweat
neither adult or infant knows what will come next
and i guess
thats the beauty of it all
or so they said

[breathtest]

My favourite line is:

'that lit the rooms of strangers as they sinned and bled and cried'

Another classic Paperleaves, i love it

[firefangled]

I especially like


but when we awaken, in sheets of sweet sweat


The last line seems wonderfully more mysterious than "or so they say." The way it is jumped out and said boo! to my assumptions. Very nice.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Would it be redundant of me to say I found this beautiful and as usual captivating? But I did note either a change from your earlier poems or that I had overlooked in them a strong current of music in the lines? Whereas in most of your poems it is the visual, the surreal visual, that carries one, here it was the lyricism.

And what a sad punctuation that last line seemed to me to be.

[paperleaves]

:) thank you all. i truly appreciate your comments. I wrote this in a sort of emotional slump yesterday, trying to perk back up and your insight helps!

[~Sophia~]

embers in raindrop formation the haunting parade
escapes every nightmare and sears through my bed

Love these lines!