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JTParreira
03-26-2009, 10:57 AM
Van Gogh died the other day
one shot
into Auvers, a shot
burst into the light
of winding wheat, one shot
in the Van Gogh's head
the wings of crows scaring the blue.

J.T.Parreira

qimissung
03-26-2009, 10:25 PM
I like your unusual topic, and in particular the last line, "the wings of crows scaring the blue."

Dark Muse
03-26-2009, 11:53 PM
I have to say the title caught my eye right away. A rather interesting poem indeed. I like how you incoperated the imagery of his paintings

a_little_wisp
03-27-2009, 01:33 AM
La tristesse durera toujours.

http://fractalontology.files.wordpress.com/2008/12/800px-vincent_van_gogh_1853-1890_-_wheat_field_with_crows_1890.jpg

And I second Muse's thoughts - the imagery is wonderful. An excellent way to capture the subject of the poem! (And hey - your signature! :D)

jon1jt
03-27-2009, 01:37 AM
Another one well done, JT. I only suggest getting rid of 'undulating.'

JTParreira
03-27-2009, 08:49 AM
Thanks for all. jon1jt: I appreciate the correction. «Undulating»: I replacing by winding wheat. Better?
j.

jon1jt
03-27-2009, 11:36 PM
Thanks for all. jon1jt: I appreciate the correction. «Undulating»: I replacing by winding wheat. Better?
j.

JT, I really like the edit and use of some alliteration. Very smooth and polished. Fantastic. :thumbs_up

JBI
03-27-2009, 11:47 PM
Heh, at first I thought it would be about the Dutch filmmaker.