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[kevinthediltz]

There is a rock
That still sits in my garden
A playful pun
From a girl I thought I knew
“You rock”
Written in paint
I thought I knew
Our families hated each other
But we hid our love
A real Romeo and Juliet
Oh I thought I knew
But times have changed
3 years
I finally hear the story
Unplanned pregnancies
And flashing lights
That bottle of pills looked so enticing
It still stands in my garden
A heartbreaking pun
So I never forget
“You rock”
Written in blood

[PrinceMyshkin]

How economically and without any maudlin effects you wrote this terribly sad story!

[kevinthediltz]

I have an answer prince: threee years of heartbreak.
So maudlin is the right adjective.

[Angelic Devil]

lol this story is quit sad :) As I read it, where one can have more than one interpretation of this story, the imagery remains the same. (Sorry if that makes no sense, I just woke up)

But it is enjoyable to read.
Keep your work up!