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Louisos
10-07-2008, 01:34 PM
I will not let you go

Entangled in the roots of sorrow,
I can’t let you go, free
me from this house of terror,
or I can’t let you go,
hunting for the tastes of pleasure,
how can I let you go?
Why do you leave me begging for more?
Do you love to hear me moan?

Satiate my last desire, before
I let you go,
eat my flesh; my heart of fire,
before I let you go,
cry for me,
lie for me,
before I let you go.

You’ve freed me from this house of pleasure,
you’ve given me the tastes of terror;
satiated my last desire,
eaten my flesh; my heart of fire,
you’ve cried for me,
you’ve lied for me,
But I will not let you go.
Cheers,
Louis

Dark Muse
10-08-2008, 12:28 PM
This was quite interesting, I really enjoyed it. I particuarly like what you did with the last stanza.

PrinceMyshkin
10-08-2008, 03:36 PM
There's a wonderful lyrical swing to this, Louisos!

Louisos
10-08-2008, 04:01 PM
Any criticism? :D

Within Me
10-08-2008, 05:22 PM
No , really it`s awesome !

Louisos
10-09-2008, 02:52 PM
Erm, ok?

romantic novel
10-11-2008, 11:59 AM
wonderful, this is really great poem