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Captain_Kuchiki
06-06-2008, 11:21 AM
I'm just an ameteur poet, so please make criticism constructive. Thank you! :smash:

The Red Planet Mars
Home of the Little Green Men
I want to meet them!

Silver morning dew
Clings to tops of green grass blades
Will be gone by noon

Powerful dragon
He always makes great balls of fire
Just like in the song!

A new brass trombone
Ready to play bass music
I play the trombone

A bird in the sky
Flaps and swoops through the warm air
Like a tiny plane

Ninja in the night
Armed with sword and shuriken
Deadly assassin

Cat napping on floor
Ball of fur soaking up the sun
What a happy cat!

goldenrod
06-06-2008, 01:09 PM
I think I like the third one down the best. Brings back memories of music and performers from the past.

Here's one for you:

"idiot savant
blessed with one awesome talent
defying I.Q."

goldenrod.

blazeofglory
06-06-2008, 09:59 PM
Full of vibrant imaginations.

amanda_isabel
06-07-2008, 04:30 PM
It was a lot of fun to read.. thank you for that :D

cute angel
12-19-2009, 01:41 PM
wow

I like that so much coz it's imaginary full of animation

I like those green creatures from mars

i think they have a relationship with the part of music coz in a movie these creatures die when they listen to music

and for the dragons they are just amazing

Buh4Bee
12-19-2009, 02:27 PM
This is a good activity to practice writing poetry. I love haiku. Nice job.