Helen Clancy
08-31-2007, 01:48 PM
Hello everyone,
Here is a poem I am currently working on, any comments would be appreciated.
Helen.
First Love
First love: rocked by powerful emotions
I walk along the pebble beach,
stand with my feet
soaked by cool water:
all other voices drowned by the ocean’s roar.
Sometimes waves come tripping
over each other, tumbling
onto uneven stones, flinging
spray thirty feet high.
I dodge waves along the promenade.
Sometimes the sea is dreamy,
reflected in mellow sky where gulls float lazily.
Specks of dancing silver
glisten in pale blue water,
My soul warmed by hazy sunlight.
I return when the sea has fallen
into a deep groaning void, broken only
by flashes of white from the crests
of waves approaching the shore,
the heavy black sky speckled with gleaming lights.
The lights across the bay send colourful rays
over the water, as the town slumbers.
I am content and at peace.
You fill my thoughts
As I turn and return home.
Here is a poem I am currently working on, any comments would be appreciated.
Helen.
First Love
First love: rocked by powerful emotions
I walk along the pebble beach,
stand with my feet
soaked by cool water:
all other voices drowned by the ocean’s roar.
Sometimes waves come tripping
over each other, tumbling
onto uneven stones, flinging
spray thirty feet high.
I dodge waves along the promenade.
Sometimes the sea is dreamy,
reflected in mellow sky where gulls float lazily.
Specks of dancing silver
glisten in pale blue water,
My soul warmed by hazy sunlight.
I return when the sea has fallen
into a deep groaning void, broken only
by flashes of white from the crests
of waves approaching the shore,
the heavy black sky speckled with gleaming lights.
The lights across the bay send colourful rays
over the water, as the town slumbers.
I am content and at peace.
You fill my thoughts
As I turn and return home.