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ampoule
07-26-2007, 07:35 AM
Extinguisher

They say,
It only takes a spark to get a fire going.
Well, the spark was there and it grew and it grew.
I longed to be one with the flame so I fanned that spark
with every part of my being.
But STOP!
I remembered I should not play with fire.

I stumbled over myself and fell full upon the fire,
Smothering it.
I stood up and brushed myself off
and began fanning from afar.
When I realized what I had done, I cried out and
fell upon my knees and thrust my hands into the ashes,
hoping, begging, praying to get burned by the spark
I hoped was still there.

But the fire had gone cold.
The ashes streaked across my face where I tried
to wipe away my tears.
I rolled upon the ground in anguish, wishing I had the chance
to do it all over again.
To be better.
To get it right.

symphony
07-26-2007, 07:38 AM
hmmmmmm

PrinceMyshkin
07-26-2007, 07:39 AM
Extinguisher

They say,
It only takes a spark to get a fire going.
Well, the spark was there and it grew and it grew.
I longed to be one with the flame so I fanned that spark
with every part of my being.
But STOP!
I remembered I should not play with fire.

I stumbled over myself and fell full upon the fire,
Smothering it.
I stood up and brushed myself off
and began fanning from afar.
When I realized what I had done, I cried out and
fell upon my knees and thrust my hands into the ashes,
hoping, begging, praying to get burned by the spark
I hoped was still there.

The ashes streaked across my face where I tried
to wipe away my tears.
I rolled upon the ground in anguish, wishing I had the chance
to do it all over again.
To be better.
To get it right.

My inclination would have been to add "at last" to that last line or as a new separate line. I cherish how this seems to just pour out, almost as if you were racing to get it all down before the last ember cooled. Thank you.

ampoule
07-26-2007, 07:46 AM
My inclination would have been to add "at last" to that last line or as a new separate line. I cherish how this seems to just pour out, almost as if you were racing to get it all down before the last ember cooled. Thank you.


You are too fast! ;) I did go back and add a line. I am thinking about 'at last' which happens to be the name of one of my favorite slow dance songs.

PrinceMyshkin
07-26-2007, 07:51 AM
You are too fast! ;)

That's not what the other girls tell me!


I did go back and add a line. I am thinking about 'at last' which happens to be the name of one of my favorite slow dance songs.

But didn't you hate the way those knees used to insinuate themselves between your--

Oh, never mind!