My poems

[madrox]

Hello all, i've jus started writing poems as a way to deal with my depression, these are the first poems i've ever wrote and id really like it if you could comment on them... Thanks

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I Bleed darkness

I Bleed darkness, cause its all that’s inside
I Bleed darkness, cause that’s all that’s on my mind

With this knife I can black it all out
Pain, anger and everything else life is about
One small cut for man, one giant black hole for many
Life is like the ocean, big and cold always looking for a penny


I Bleed darkness, cause its all that’s inside
I Bleed darkness, cause that’s all that’s on my mind


Feeling the draw off death for so long
Use to fight the reaper, now I don’t feel so strong
The game of life is hard, some win some lose
The winners win big, the losers just cut and bruise


I Bleed darkness, cause its all that’s inside
I Bleed darkness, cause that’s all that’s on my mind

The Last night on this wicked earth
I say goodbye to the hurt I’ve felt since birth
As the blade hits the pipes under skin, I truly feel alive
When I see the gushing red river I know I won’t survive

Drained of the blackness, I bleed no more
Drained of the blackness, my soul can soar

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My everything

You are my everything
When im with you, life doesn’t sting
I’m the car and you’re my fuel
You’re more valuable than a jewel

I love you more than life itself
With you I can push myself of the shelf
Dive head first into anything
You are my everything

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I’m a zombie

Neither alive nor dead
I have no feelings except pain
Trapped in this limbo
It’s my own fault
I did this to myself
I killed every emotion that gave me life
I carved my body like a sculpture till it was dead
I am the living dead

I’m a zombie

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Rivers of red

I play God and create rivers of red
Out on the White Plains I leave it all dead

With my magic blade I make beauty fade
Let out anger like a grenade

Get the pain that’s kept near my liver
And Wash it down the river

Hope that I don’t feel it no more
But it always finds a way ashore

So I keep creating rivers of red
Praying for the day I leave the pain dead

[Kendall]

Oooh!! HEY NICK. Yay, I'm glad you registered here. I'm sure you'll recieve some great comments, and some encouraging ones too. Because your poetry is GREAT!

[fallen_angelx86]

hey, for a first time writer your poems are brilliant. They show real depth of feeling and emotion. I also suffer from depression and i find poetry a great source of comfort and release. Keep it up i can't wait to read more of your work!
Keep smiling...Hannah

[rocksea]

well sure, you really good in writing it out!!

[Suetang]

Hello Nick

Through your words you have exposed the very depth of your soul and I applaud you for having the courage to write your innermost feelings and to do it so very well. I can so relate to your words about depression for I have been there and I hope that your writing helps to bring you some comfort as I know it does for me. I thoroughly enjoyed each of your poems and I will look forward to reading more from you. Welcome!

"Love is the lifeline I cling to
when grief threatens to pull me down
into eternal darkness"

Take care...........Sue

[madrox]

hey guys thanks for all the positive comments!

[Helga]

It's great, I use poetry too as a way to release feelings I don't want, like my depression.. great, keep writing!

[Petruchio]

WOW MAN!!! you seem damned depressed!
Nice poems by the way!
I have also written some but nothing so .......um.......depressing and hair raising as this piece of ...........stuff!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hope it really does make you feel light!!!!