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jon1jt
09-20-2006, 11:30 AM
Night drains the sky of milk from cows

like a uterus
from hell

Pulled by a conspiring sucking sound
nervous stars you can hear coming through
a faint rip in the seam of things, between you and the black matter
-verse on the verge of Hawking-izing
the night the city burned like a modern-day Carthage

all for
some Queens-y
Cosmo face
from 90th
and North
with her human resource pedigree and O’Neilian pipe dreams
while your dreams stir at the bottom of morning coffee, black
hoofing down a real bagel leftovers 'on the company'

The church-filled halls ring in your ears
in one formaldehyde blue monday
tapping the pointer against the neon-glared presentation board
bar graphs sautéed in (your) psychedelic bar-stool-trance-like projections
the night before holed up in some first-class piss and s**t house with atomic poop
welling up inside you (grandiose upheavals of dark matter?)
she's sketching pink elephants
as you write half-original sonnet on her pristine belly with starry climes
How would you recall that scribble in the stall
in such a tequila sunrise hour?
the flowers you picked from a rooftop botanical
and cherry blossoms near the bustop
which ends
heaving over a
toilet staring at your
Pontius Pilate SOUL
in the reflection
with brain clappings
of a young girl with PINK bike streamers
floating you a paper airplane
out of a
PINK
slip

the fuzzy peach tickle in your mouth
and the way the road bends in the reflection of your seagrams
sails you into a mad after-hour jaunt
starting at
Bleecker on
and on...
to
UNION
SQUARE
wiping
poop
on a camera lens hanging high
the screaming-bagpipe-playing-Irish-bar-man pause
before turning the deadbolt Clunk

she lays
across a bus stop bench looking up at the stars
with her head on your lap
taking the last drag of your Monday morning smoke
monologuing her sad-go-round life

your head tiptoes cold 43rd street box car
clam chowder
scrambled eggs
toast
and burnt bacon strips
overpriced fluffy merry-go-round cheese cake
with a slim fork
waiter with his.....................god bless! smile
...................and the frogs that came falling out of
the sky in one ribbitting apocalyptic

poop

dramasnot6
12-29-2006, 09:19 AM
I'm sorry if I'm a bit too late to reply to this but I just think it's a shame no one has so far. Your poem has some of the most powerful imagery i have ever read, my favorite examples are "like a uterus
from hell" and "half-original sonnet on her pristine belly with starry climes". When reading the title you expect this to be something tasteless and crude, but it really gives you a shock. It's a bit hard to swallow all the meaning and messages in the poem with this intense imagery hitting you, but there is no denying that it is incredibly effective. Well done :thumbs_up

jon1jt
12-29-2006, 06:37 PM
I'm sorry if I'm a bit too late to reply to this but I just think it's a shame no one has so far. Your poem has some of the most powerful imagery i have ever read, my favorite examples are "like a uterus
from hell" and "half-original sonnet on her pristine belly with starry climes". When reading the title you expect this to be something tasteless and crude, but it really gives you a shock. It's a bit hard to swallow all the meaning and messages in the poem with this intense imagery hitting you, but there is no denying that it is incredibly effective. Well done :thumbs_up


thanks so much for retrieving this one from the 'litnet graveyard'! :lol: that's what makes writing poems worth every drop to me; it's in the never knowing "when" someone will be open to its energies. and this one took a while didn't it?! i think you're right about the title turning people off, not to mention some strange references. in the original, the lines are staggered and broken and run around the page, but i was unable to present it that way here as the formatting doesn't allow. despite, you were open and captured the imagery, and so for that i'm inspired to write another poem. :) thanks dramas.