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    Mad Dog


    He was just an old man
    who’d come out for a pint
    on the Bank Holiday.

    Bent almost double
    he walked with a metal walking stick,
    the sort they give you at the hospital.

    He was wearing black trainers
    and a beige Harrington jacket.

    Slowly and shakily
    he walked out
    to the beer garden,
    pint in one hand, stick in the other.

    A mad dog ran up to him and barked,
    he said nothing as it hounded him.
    Just limped to a table
    and drank his beer.

    Shakespeare claimed that dogs barked at Richard III.
    I think that he had a disability as well.
    docendo discimus

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    Richard was a good king and he was English. Shakespeare knew all about barking because he was the mad dog. He also was a monkey signifying nothing.

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    Edward V & Richard of Shrewsbury, Duke of York may beg to differ. I suppose no one will ever really know. I doubt Shakespeare was a monkey. They don't know how to sharpen quills.
    docendo discimus

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    There's a lot packed in here. The parallel to Richard III is particularly striking. Sad sad sad ending as we now know, and ironic. The mad dog and englishman reference also adds curiosity to the poem. I think it's put together really well, except for the last line, which is a bit clunky. you can probably lose "I think". Maybe something understated, like "he too had a disability", for a better effect.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Yeah, the last line is awkward. I nearly called the poem 'Mad dog & an Englishman' LOL.
    docendo discimus

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