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    ésprit de l’escalier DanielBenoit's Avatar
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    Miscarriage

    Fleeting night in bonfire
    Conception at midnight
    Brief solidarity.

    The moon plummets down upon the sprinkling air
    The alcohol sanitizes hands, artificial water.
    The luminous reflection which so seemed to be the plunging
    Twine, now splashes upon the shimmering lake.
    Reflection of face and silent memory, awakening
    Empty forest once alive, integrating
    Signs of reiterating wake
    Regurgitating ache
    Plummets down to the filtering vacuum.
    Fetus, a dry expectation
    Already, once dead.

    “Doth thee have the shimmering glow of thy lunar orbit in thine hands?
    Crush it”
    The Moments of Dominion
    That happen on the Soul
    And leave it with a Discontent
    Too exquisite — to tell —
    -Emily Dickinson
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TVW8GCnr9-I
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ckGIvr6WVw4

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    veni vidi vixi Bakiryu's Avatar
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    While I quite like this, it didn't flow as much as your other poems. I do love the imagery and the idea behind it. :3
    Shall these bones live?

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    The contrast of the brief encounter with three short lines, followed by a much longer sketch of the gruesome, painful operation, is excellent. The end quote is stunning.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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