Dead frog belly up spread-eagled on a footpath, dry amphibian corpse on a warm day, now in heaven with Basho leaps eternal ponds.
The 'leaps eternal ponds' line of this paired haiku is incredible connected with the image of the dead frog. A precious and excellent mindleap! Just wondering though, is it the nature of this this of poem that the first haiku is really just descriptive? I feel it would have been better to have more spark in the first haiku as well. But maybe this kind of poem isn't supposed to work like this. Excellent work though!
I like your reference to Basho.
The leap from frog to eagle is a big one!
In evolutionary terms maybe....
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