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    Pecking Order

    PECKING ORDER

    In these boreal days, upon the cusp of solstice,
    spare a thought for all the birds who scavenge here for crumbs of solace…..

    the humming bird from far Cathay,
    her shimmer like a gemstone in the pelt of winter

    the turtle dove from Central Park,
    her cooing ever poignant, ever soothing to the troubled brow

    the feisty kookaburra, chirruping and cursing at the brou-haha,
    the tiny warbler dancing in the margin, never heard but never far away

    the Cockney sparrow, vibrant, sparking,
    never bowing to the posturing of bullfinches or woodpeckers

    the firebird, a phoenix seeking bright ascendance,
    lily trotter, feet upon the water, Dylanesque as ever
    then a puff of dust as roadrunner goes past in snakeskin boots

    and here’s the speckled starling, oft neglected,
    mimicking the gods yet with the nerve to shhit upon their shoulders

    and on a distant perch, the cockatiel,
    his measured words as close as birds can get to being divine,
    his every squawk as wise as Socrates

    while on the strand, the solitary heron, slow to settle,
    fixes eyes upon the waves that scrabble for the shore

    the patient vulture enters from the shadows, poised to probe
    the rotten carcasses of those who perished on the barbs of criticism

    havoc cried aloft upon the wing, a hawk a-hover on the lilting wind,
    with talons bared yet tipped in velvet

    all eclipsed by looming shadow from a mightier wingspan,
    hooded eyes attuned to form and syntax,
    scattering seeds and peanuts as she hits the table…..

    but alas too late to make a difference
    as that ruddy kitty-cat emerges from the fireside; all is quiet, all is calm.

    H
    Last edited by hillwalker; 12-23-2010 at 03:15 PM. Reason: typo

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    Alas I didn't know what to make of "far Cathy" unless that was an unfamiliar spelling of Cathai? Alas, because it delayed my pleasure for an instant in the wit and music throughout this.

    But I must confess too that I didn't recognize the "mightier wingspan" of the next to last three lines.

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    Quote Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin View Post
    Alas I didn't know what to make of "far Cathy"
    Typo typo typo!!!

    Thanks for spotting it with your eagle-eye - and no, that isn't a hint!

    H

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    And the Scottish Osprey, rising from the hill
    swoops over the Muse's loch

    to snatch another glittering poem
    slippery with mischief!

    Merry Christmas, hill.

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    Cheers b|v - tongue-in-beak this one.

    H

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    A compendious aviary, though I'm a bit confused about the time and setting. On the "cusp of the Solstice": which one? Later on we're told about the hummingbird in the "pelt of winter," but why is the tiny little bird still here, not having yet taken off for warmer climes--

    which brings us to some of the others --the cockatiel and other tropical birds as well as one from the Land Down Under, the kookaburra. What part of the world is this? Maybe it is a heated birdhouse in a zoo?

    Yet it must be some unusual birdhouse since there is a mythical bird as well, The Firebird, who is said to be immortal, having the power to rise from the ashes after death. As yours fooly said elsewhere recently, we can hardly hold the poet responsible for the gaps in his reader's education. I would have expected a reference to Stravinsky but Dylan Thomas? Could you give me a little hint on the details of the analogy?

    The only technical quibble I have is the spelling of "brouhaha" -- no hyphen, but using it adds to the chirping sounds of this piece. So maybe the "haha" part of the word is set off for a cute play on words.

    Your closing lines come as a complete surprise --just like a feline on the prowl suddenly coming upon a bird. As a result, the piece is absolutely charming.

    P.S.
    May your nights this season be as "silent" or as boisterous as you choose!
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    Quote Originally Posted by AuntShecky View Post
    Could you give me a little hint on the details of the analogy?
    Look no further than these pages - neither zoo nor aviary, just the bird-table of our beloved Poetry forum.

    H :-)

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    I am confused by the use of boreal. Otherwise I enjoyed your avian humor H.


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    'boreal' = relating to the Northern hemisphere (such as Aurora Borealis - the Northern Lights - cf Aurora Australis which appears in the Southern skies).

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    Quote Originally Posted by hillwalker View Post
    Look no further than these pages - neither zoo nor aviary, just the bird-table of our beloved Poetry forum.

    H :-)
    I meant this simile, which I still don't get:

    Dylanesque as ever

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    I do beg your pardon -

    lily trotter - aka jacana - fellow scribe 'Jack of Hearts' (whose avatar, and much of his output recalls a younger Bob Dylan). Also, his nom de plume comes from Dylan song 'Lily, Rosemary and the Jack of Hearts'.
    Rather convoluted - but that was the way my brain seemed to be working yesterday afternoon.....

    Best wishes

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    Ah, this was the pièce de résistance of this Christmas page! he he, hill (and of the ruddy kitty!)! By now, "all is calm", no doubt, with some red spots on the snow...
    Happy New Year to you none the less!

    Bar

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    Alas, too late to hammer this mischief
    Last edited by yuka; 12-26-2010 at 12:10 PM.

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    Very clever, Hillwalker.

    Prince once posted an eight word poem here. It was the first thing I thought of in trying to decipher yours.

    I must say working together in my head both poems added to the experience of reading each.


    Birds in adjacent cages
    pondering
    each other's dreams

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    Sounds like my cat Tiger! Its adorable how you give each bird its own character. The shift from avian to literary brings it to a new level. But the kitty took care of it all! Great dramatic ending.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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