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    the slightly surreal might appeal

    i call them like i see them
    if my freedom is questioned
    but the rest of the time
    i ask questions seek depth
    and look form all perceptions
    every concept has many
    dimensions but if you choose
    to venture to the centre
    in relentless pensive sessions
    then you will find that
    there are many assets to having
    a multi-faceted imagination
    whether you're up late pacing
    the hall looking for more
    than an answer or making calls
    to deities which you perceive
    to be prayers or you're laying
    awake trying escape a factual
    landscape which you've come
    to consider fake if you take
    a moment to imagine
    the maddest things that you've
    seen happen and examine
    them from numerous angles
    and tangle the wires of time
    to see whether the outcome
    changes and remain patient
    then you'll find that you're
    multi-faceted imagination
    has taken you place which
    is more than sense data and
    names and faces this place
    which transcends the offensive
    and enthralls the senses
    a place where a penchant for
    the slightly surreal might appeal
    while you watch the wheels of
    time appear and turn in your mind
    Last edited by Sampson; 12-23-2010 at 03:57 PM.

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    I like the idea and concept of your piece, perception and imagination fuel the human writing experience, but the run on stanza does not sit well with eye nor brain.


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    Quote Originally Posted by mpdague View Post
    I like the idea and concept of your piece, perception and imagination fuel the human writing experience, but the run on stanza does not sit well with eye nor brain.


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    I agree, I liked the writing but it was hard to read without pause.

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