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    SMS from Bari

    I got it
    a long excited SMS
    with smile
    Why did you write me to say
    that we don't know each other
    I wonder if we were ever classmates
    and also best friend during the studies
    I wonder why we don't live with both families
    in a small town near the river
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    A very beguiling piece - I'm not sure whether it refers to a misdialled SMS from some unknown texter that the writer received or something deeper. The last two lines are particularly intriguing.....

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    roflmao ode g8!
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    Quote Originally Posted by lacadalet_ View Post
    I got it
    a long excited SMS
    with smile
    Why did you write me to say
    that we don't know each other
    I wonder if we were ever classmates
    and also best friend during the studies
    I wonder why we don't live with both families
    in a small town near the river
    ... because today our lives tend to be scattered
    the world lost the sense of unity of time space and story
    the old rules of classical Greek theatre...
    or is it
    because our whole earth has become
    a small town near the river...? but then -
    why we don't live with both families together.

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    I too feel that there are loose ends that need to be tied for a more coherent read. But I like the way you reveal the contents of the sms in layers under layers.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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