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    his green eyes


    his green eyes


    so dazzling
    these emeralds

    so dear
    this unconditional love

    so distant
    like he didn’t see me

    so dilated
    it only means one thing



    it’s so definitive
    and i’m so in denial



    the vet says
    their eyes
    never close right
    when they
    die



    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    so haunted, Haunted. Wish it was a doctor not a vet. You have a way with words. Ethereal just sprung to mind. Trashy never does.
    Jerry.

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    beautiful poem haunted
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Jerry, you're forever so kind. Ethereal is such a beautiful word, thanks. Still, it will wind up in Trashy eventually...and I hope you will again grace it with a kind comment.

    Delta, thank you so much!!!

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Would that be trashy poems the most mis-named of all threads ?

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    hmmm.....Jerry's now critical of my naming abilities

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Haunted... This one is uplifting. Mwah to you dear.

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    Taut - and very poignant.

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    Not your naming abilities, your self depreciation :P
    cheers
    Jerry

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    ahh that's just what I do best Jerry. Thanks for being so kind!

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    thanks Prince, I appreciated your comment!

    Mary, it's only uplifting in that it brings me closer to him again in the poem. Your mwahs are always heartfelt!

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    it's really nice poem, but it makes me really sad.

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    Thank you Nik, that was Apricot, sorry it made you sad.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    oh, don't be sorry, dear... <3

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