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    Bitten by the Backpacker Bug

    there's a bug in my backpack
    and it bit me
    forever destined to live this life
    like a gypsy
    drifting city to city
    the rhythm pushes me
    forward
    lord of all i survey
    and my place in the world
    is wherever i will sleep tonight
    listening
    to whichever drum beats tonight
    smoking gitanes
    on a beach in Nice tonight

    but with the sunrise
    my tired eyes
    will widen
    to new horizions
    and i'll find myself
    on the road again
    heading out
    or heading home again

    with a collection of poems
    and a half smoked pack of cigarettes
    my pillow is my backpack
    but i rarely let my head rest
    because there's little warmth
    in a hostel bed
    and i got no time for lying
    awake, depressed

    the night is young
    and i'm lost on the continent

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    Sampson, there's lots good in this, I loved your opening lines but particularly

    "but with the sunrise
    my tired eyes
    will widen
    to new horizions
    and i'll find myself
    on the road again
    heading out
    or heading home again"

    which is just great. Hope it's nice in Nice Best, H

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    Something's gotta give PrinceMyshkin's Avatar
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    There's a great jogging bounce throughout this and a real lift in the last line.

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    cool poem, I really enjoyed it. Have a fantastic journey!

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    This poem provokes such a swell of Wanderlust in me as I don't know what to do with.
    Thanks for sharing, Sampson;
    this is appetizing;
    I feel I must get up and walk anywhere, if only to satisfy a need for motion inspired by your words.

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    Thanks guys! Though I am afraid to say I am no longer in Nice, or even on the road... I figured I had to come home after Amsterdam (;

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