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    Memorial

    Behind some far off window
    other loved ones wait
    and hold back bitter tears while
    they listen for the gate

    A gate that will not open
    to fill their hearts' content
    for here their love lies bleeding
    while over him, I'm bent

    I reach into his pocket
    and retrieve a photograph
    a picture of him, and his love
    smiling, on some garden path

    That I could fulfill the wishes
    that would carry him from here
    I would take back our meeting
    in this war of hate and fear


    This is dedicated to the memory
    of Sgt. Carlos Noe Saenz
    "Remember, we are all in this alone." - Lilly Tomlin

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    How fitting on 'Memorial Day' (am I right? I hope so).

    A wonderful little poem of honour and unselfish regret.

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    This is written, I suppose, in the imagined voice of his former adversary? Quite touching...

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    Masterful, hack. I got the same sense from it that Prince did.

    Best, H

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    I understand it was the memorial day in US.
    How noble of you to have paid tribute to those who fought while dreaming of peace... "peace" (to quote s.o. we know), dear hack. bar

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    Hi Hack,

    I like the imagery in the poem. I think it was Hemingway who wrote about all the paper: notes, letters and photographs, one finds around the scene just after a battle. Little bits of who these people were, now left to speak about them after their voices failed. I guess the tale of how soldiers realize how close and how alike their enemies they are is an old one. Growing up in the deep south, I was always fascinated by the nearby Civil War battlefields and the stories that still drift around them. Nothing can epitomize stories of killing one's brother better than the story of a county at odds with itself. I enjoyed your thought provoking poem, thanks.

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    For Carlos

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    That brought the hairs on the back of my neck up. And, I confess, a tear to the eye. A masterly piece of work, and a fitting epithaph for Sgt Saenz. Thank you.
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    It's so moving, Hack, and the sentiments are just beautiful. Thanks.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Thinking of you Carlos,
    Rest in Peace
    "Remember, we are all in this alone." - Lilly Tomlin

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