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    Three seasons in a week

    It was a bracing walk
    The sun shone brightly on the lake,
    A weak autumnal sun,
    Bright but un-warming
    And a light wind stirred the branches
    Of the leafless weeping cherry tree
    And added to the chill
    The familiar pair of resident ducks
    Bobbed on the choppy surface
    Seemingly oblivious to the cold
    Mist on the distant mountains
    Hinted at what was to come
    By the time I pushed open my front gate
    I was suitably refreshed
    And glad to be home

    That night the storm hit
    A storm that began as a hurricane
    Far out across the ocean
    Then as it hit the land
    It was merely a tropical storm
    When it got to us it was just a storm
    But what a storm it was
    Thick black clouds turning day to night
    It rained and promised to rain even more
    Inches and inches of rain
    Large gray drops ran down the bare trees
    And splashed on the grey waters of the lake
    Bouncing off the green and brown backs
    Of the resilient swimming ducks
    The Hurricanes remnants
    Took three days to pass
    And left the lake considerable deeper
    .
    In the calm after the storm
    We basked in the warmth
    Of a bonus summers like day
    Left in the tropical storms wake
    The two ducks swam lazily across the still water
    Bees were out looking for flowers
    Ants crawled around in the grass,
    Adding to their winter stock of food.
    And squirrels chattered away
    As they searched for acorns and pine nuts
    And ran amongst the shadows
    Of the dogwood trees
    A blue heron flew to the very top
    Of the leafless weeping cherry tree
    Doubtless lost in the storm
    It spent the day recharging its batteries
    And getting its bearings
    Later it joined the ducks on the water
    Obviously to ask directions

    The next day summer had gone again
    And autumn had returned
    The day began with an overcast sky and chilly breeze
    Later as I walked for a while beside the lake
    It had become a warm and sunny day.
    Warm of course, is a relative term
    It was above freezing, just
    The sun was bright; the wind light but cold
    All was silent, the waters calm
    A duck slept in the shadow
    Of the leafless weeping cherry
    The other was close by but silent
    And the blue heron was perched,
    Motionless, on the top of the bare dogwood
    Before it launched itself
    And after circling the lake once it was on its way
    The squirrels were hiding
    I saw no bees searching for flowers
    And the ants were out of sight

    Winter arrived yesterday
    With heavy snow falling in the morning
    Then the skies cleared
    And the temperature plummeted
    Today the landscape wass even more beautiful
    And the lake was frozen
    The ducks were no where to be seen
    I don’t know where they go
    But they always come back
    The ground is crisp under foot
    And it is very very cold
    The squirrels were the only creatures I saw
    And they were happily raiding their stores
    Feasting on acorns and chasing around
    I decided it was too cold for me
    And headed for the fireside
    Too reflect on this week’s abundance of seasons

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    A very beautifully-painted picture. I especially like the sequence of the seasons in this poem--from soft to strong and from warmly and comfortably appeasing to harsh, repeatedly-- just like the waves in the very nature, the mother earth, that you've painted.

    I don't know if this would ruin the poem, but if more sounds and especially smells are added, it couldn't take me any closer to the real place.

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    I'd have read this differently, with more patience, if it had been presented as a short story in which the narrator was more than a highly evolved camera but had some objective that was woven in and among the the aspects of the weather. Weather, of course, is virtually a cliche in setting the protagonist's mood but here it was tempting to speculate whether he himself was going through something reflective of or influenced by the weather.

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