The Golden Gates of Smarkand
Greetings I am currently a high school student however I recently have embarked upon the path of poetry, hopefully in the future poetry can become more than just a hobby for me. Anyways to cut to the point this is my first poem and I would deeply appreciate it if some of you could take the time to read it and give any feedback or voice opinions about it.
Last edited by Alexander III; 01-17-2010 at 04:40 PM.
welcome - I praise your daring and debut - keep writing... just turn your ear more to your inner voice... to the Speaking Silence of your soul...
any other opinions ? and thanks for your comment Bar22do.
Did Pizarro go to Samarkand?
I immensely enjoyed the theme and visual imagery of this poem. tend to enjoy poems about classical themes.
Hope you get to ski.
Thank you, oh and to answer your question I have no idea honestly I used Pizarro more for the type of conquest which he represents.
I have one last question, shouldn't Pizarro descend on the beast and slaves, not the other way around? What did I miss?
Ah yes I can understand the confusion, In reference to the beasts and slaves they descend upon a cacophony of celebration as they are being brought back to the city as conquests and prizes of war and exploration.
To me it was confusing, maybe clean that up a little or not. overall it is still well written, like your other humorous poem.
Last edited by Buh4Bee; 12-13-2009 at 08:25 AM.
Yes, thank you for having pointed that out, Ill see if there is some way I may revise that segment.
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