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    almost a sonnet...

    this is only my third try at writing poems so....

    how often godless i've been named,
    my actions ranked as blasphemy,
    yet such ill-fame be awry i declaim,
    for in thee i see god's prodigy;
    there rules a god i do believe,
    for he made a wonderous thing as thee,
    for man can only faith conceive,
    when godly wonders he can see;
    oh fallen god's of love and whine,
    how seem ye now rediculous,
    that i have found my own devine,
    whose love has made me credulous;
    out,out, brief candle.
    life is but a walking shadow, a poor player that struts and frets his hour upon the stage. and then is heared nomore, it is a tale told by an idiot full of sound and fury. a signifying nothing.


    "judge a man by his questions rather than his answers"
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    i like how you concluded the subject... some of the lines fit together very well. i always played sub-zero also.

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    It's certainly a very classically inspired sonnet... how conscious was the decision to use the anachronistic early-modern English words and spelling? I always find that it takes me out of the work when it's used in modern poetry and, indeed, one can use that very thing to great effect if that's the intent. But this seems a bit imitative of the classic sonnets for my tastes...
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

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