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    She came in the night

    It was in the early spring
    When nature causes sap to rise
    Before the dawn in the early hours
    When from the shadows she emerged
    With an ethereal quality
    She moved slowly in the half light
    Of the flickering candlelight
    Revealing her form in snapshots
    Naked but for the flimsiest garb
    Something filmy, delicate and sheer,
    Which hung from her sylphish form
    Like a fine cloak of gossamer
    A delicate silken web covered with dew
    As she came closer her scent assailed my senses
    Initially it cloyed in my throat, sickly sweet
    Then intoxicated me like strong wine
    Then she stood before me
    Wearing the light gauzy fabric
    Diaphanous and insubstantial
    Which rendered her naked to my eyes
    And I gazed into the hypnotic green of hers
    The spell was broken by her sweet breath
    Which plumed between us in the cold air
    In rhythm to the heaving of her chest
    Her breasts crowned by her arousal
    My eyes moved from the erect sentinels
    To the sable triangle below her soft belly
    Then returned to be once again entranced
    By the sultry green eyes of the seductress
    In a silken movement she discarded the flimsy garment
    And moved closer, only millimeters away
    So close I could feel the beating of her heart
    And with every breath she took
    Her nipples gently brushed against my skin
    Then I felt her hands on my skin
    And electricity seemed to move between us
    Her touch, soft and delicate on my skin
    And as they moved across my body
    It felt as though I was being wrapped in silk
    Her lips pressed gently against my skin
    As she kissed my chest, my neck, my throat
    Then up to my cheek and finally my lips
    Where she moistly kissed my mouth
    Then without warning she became animal and urgent
    As she pushed me onto the bed
    Her nails dug deep into my flesh
    And her mouth pressed hard against mine
    Her tongue was darting into my mouth like a piston
    Her hands sought me out and found me hard and pulsing
    She tugged at my hardness, then enveloped me
    Immersing me in her, coating me in warm honey
    Her muscles were tight about me
    As all at once she was rising and falling on me
    Her mouth left mine and her tongue explored my ear
    And her sharp teeth chewed at my lobe
    Deep rasping breaths turned into loud animal moans
    As her exertions became more urgent
    Her mouth returned to mine as her passions grew
    And when the first orgasm rippled through her
    Her kisses turned to bites and she bit my lip
    Then she began to lose control and she lost the rhythm
    I gripped tight on her hips and imposed my beat
    Her moans had turned to wails
    And she whipped me with her hair
    As she cast her head back and fourth with each stroke
    Then that moment arrived
    When we both stood upon the edge,
    Of that most delicious precipice
    Between the bestial coupling, primeval and base
    And that joyful release of climax
    I exploded inside her with an involuntary grunt
    And she let out a banshee wail
    All of a sudden I was wide awake
    Laying alone, my skin moist with sweat
    The bed in total disarray
    I was breathing hard and
    I imagined I could still smell her scent
    And as I moistened my lips
    I detected something odd
    The metallic taste of blood on my tongue

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    Excellent Biggus. I totally enjoyed your piece.
    Since we seem no longer to write about the union with God, writing about sex has become the ultimate test for the writer; to communicate the uncommunicable.
    For me, I appreciated the balance between the the two extremes, that I find so difficult to attain myself.
    Lawrence tried to portray sex as in a real sense an act of holy communion. For him, flesh was sacramental of the spirit.
    Wheras on a more ethereal plane, we have long passed the Victorian era when asterisks were followed after a certain interval by a baby!

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    I'm hard.

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    Very, very hard.
    Last edited by Lads of E3; 11-23-2009 at 04:36 PM.

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    Hey biggus.
    Ok, this was a maybe too much for me, but I have to say it is well written.
    Maybe in the first half of it, you focus too much on her leaving "you" out of the frame.
    Anyway, I'm not a big commentarist or anything alike, I'm just tellig you what's on my mind.
    But I believe it is well written and the end is UNIQUE/GREAT.
    I'm always seeing what you have wrotten. Like your pen
    "My reason for preferring the darkness is that in the dark you have to describe yourself.
    In the daylight other people describe you."

    -Old Woody
    Mr. God This is Anna by Fynn

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