Mindfully
Through each day go forth.
And tumult and terror rains eternal.
Invisible to you.
Not something I would share.
That one, withering secret.
Better left untold.
Lest it destroy the reality.
Of us...Together.
Mindfully
Through each day go forth.
And tumult and terror rains eternal.
Invisible to you.
Not something I would share.
That one, withering secret.
Better left untold.
Lest it destroy the reality.
Of us...Together.
I really like it; short, economic and very potent. I like the alliteration of the Ts in the third line. I might merely remove the "and" from that line, as well as the "together" in the last line and maybe "one" after "that one".
"As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung
"To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists
"I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers
I like this little cloud of thunder....
Wow, thanks a lot!Originally Posted by MorpheusSandman
Ya, originally, it didn't have the "together" at the end, but when I re-typed it here, for some reason I just thought it would be better :P Haha guess not.
Thanks again for all the CC
Hehe, I'm glad you do.
Thanks!
This is really a very interesting poem different from the archetype.
“Those who seek to satisfy the mind of man by hampering it with ceremonies and music and affecting charity and devotion have lost their original nature””
“If water derives lucidity from stillness, how much more the faculties of the mind! The mind of the sage, being in repose, becomes the mirror of the universe, the speculum of all creation.
Why thank you
Very kind
Very nice, be better without the punctuation. A nice brief poem that says a lot with a little!
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Do you mean just the ellipses, or all punctuation?
Thanks for the feedback!
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