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    Exclamation The Dead Can Talk

    If The Dead Could Talk

    by mazHur

    Step gently on this ground,stranger!
    this ain't no ordinary patch of earth.
    i know this trespassing isn't your fault,
    how could you have suspected
    and known earth's secrets.

    Do not be surprised , sir,
    no treasure is buried at this spot,
    not even a snake's bill you will find there,
    this ain't no site for worship too.

    It's not even a drug-trafficker' s mound,
    no hashish or marijuana 'wealth' hidden beneath;
    nothing archaeologically significant
    artifacts or relics are embedded there.

    A barren patch with sparse grass
    leveled to ground at the hands of time;
    beneath it 'live' the crumbled bones,
    hair and nails of a fallen man,
    long forgotten long abandoned
    by claimants of love once his.

    Can you hear the crackling of his bones?
    Can you hear the sound of his bleak skull?
    Can you hear the shriek of his departed soul?
    Oh, no! How could you! You are a living one,
    not attuned to the world of the dead;
    you belong to a different thriving community
    that once i bragged as of mine.

    O sir! Tread gently on the patch below your feet
    the thumping of your feet hurts me,
    it disturbs my visiting soul and the angel
    who is noting my life-account
    and peeping at you with an envious eye.
    Last edited by mazHur; 09-09-2009 at 10:04 AM. Reason: title changes done
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    When asked how World War III would be fought, Einstein replied that he didn't know. But he knew how World War IV would be fought: With sticks and stones.
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    All are at the crossroads qimissung's Avatar
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    I like the twist at the end, mazHur. It's a good poem; I like the last three stanzas the best.
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
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    Thanks, Qim.
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    I totally agree with Qim! I also liked the last stanzas from where you revealed the notion of the poem. Nicely presented as well!

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    Quite a good ending. Reminded me of Thomas Hardy's "Ah, Are you Digging on my Grave"
    The Moments of Dominion
    That happen on the Soul
    And leave it with a Discontent
    Too exquisite — to tell —
    -Emily Dickinson
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TVW8GCnr9-I
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    Quote Originally Posted by DanielBenoit View Post
    Quite a good ending. Reminded me of Thomas Hardy's "Ah, Are you Digging on my Grave"
    Thanks Daniel...I was not knowing about Hardy's poem, thanks again for pointing it out ...will have a look at that.
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    When asked how World War III would be fought, Einstein replied that he didn't know. But he knew how World War IV would be fought: With sticks and stones.
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