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    A rainless window and I

    A rainless window. And I,
    indifferent, parsed the night,
    absently twined the wind at ease
    between my fingers tracing
    the city silhouettes. Contoured
    a new night in this newfound
    canvas.


    Wings
    of dormant birds are beating low.
    The mind is slow.
    The speed of this hand
    perpetual in its want to wipe off
    the sacrilege of far-off neon-lights--
    surly outlanders of the night.


    With the wind the voice
    of a waif whose night it is
    comes in a slow, broken song.
    I know the child, I know
    the passerby who cut him off.
    I know the city’s skyline divides
    the night,
    this night I don’t know, can’t remember.


    It must rain tonight.
    For me to write it must.
    Wash this window off its obscenities,
    off the cities and off their lights
    of filths, and flashes, and flames.


    Where is the love in this?
    Where are the Persian poets
    of love? One can only wake up
    in muslin mornings and feel Hafez gaze
    at a similar silken air,
    twining the same wind
    in knowing fingers.
    And mornings become
    of memories of tombstones…
    you, who is cast away
    from man and sanctioned company
    you, who here must assay
    Love: this be your sanctuary.


    And it must rain this dawn.
    For me to live it must.
    The city must hang
    in the camera obscura,
    the moon a mere fresco
    in a moonspurned room.


    - Symphony
    Last edited by symphony; 06-24-2009 at 09:17 PM.
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    This is simply wonderful. I tried to find a favorite stanza to highlight but would have ended up highlighting the whole poem. Beautifully written!

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    This is poem is pretty sweet. It isn't what I usually write about but it is good. Great job!

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    A superb poem! The imagery and word selection are truly remarkable; That first stanza especially contains a couple of really stand-out parts in "parsed the night" "tracing the silhouettes of the city".
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

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    Wonderful!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    More like rapture than merely an excellent poem! If you can write like this (and obviously you can!), how can you stand to do anything else?

    A quibble (?): Surely most of the "off"s in the 4th stanza are meant to be "of"s?

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    Quote Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin View Post
    A quibble (?): Surely most of the "off"s in the 4th stanza are meant to be "of"s?
    It's perfect as it is


    And thanks to everyone who read and commented!
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    This is an extremely beautiful poem. I thoroughly enjoyed "It must rain tonight.
    For me to write it must.
    Wash this window off its obscenities,
    off the cities and off their lights
    of filths, and flashes, and flames"

    thank you for sharing!
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    I agree, this is wonderful. Symphony is writing again and we are so blessed to be readers.
    LET THERE BE LIGHT

    "Love follows knowledge." – St. Catherine of Siena

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    Quote Originally Posted by Virgil View Post
    I agree, this is wonderful. Symphony is writing again and we are so blessed to be readers.
    "Writing" may be an understatement. In the case of this and her newest, singing might be the more appropriate verb.

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    oh, it was amazing! i love your poems!
    It must rain this dawn
    for me to live it must
    ...

    that was so beautifull...i could almost hear the very-much-wanted rain falling!
    Find your dream and stick with it...or your life will have slipped past in a whisper with you still on the bottom.

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