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    I've been reading your poems and they are all so good. I love your rhyme, and another thing is that you started with To morning a great optimistic fresh poem and you give us the emotional scale from happy and fresh to sad and upset. I had to read them a few times to grasp them, they are so simple and thoughtful... very good work!!
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    Manchester blues is especially pleasing to the Mod unit known as Aimus Sage. It is imperative that the aforementioned Mod unit compliment the other Mod Unit known as Nightshade on her accomplishment.
    There is no darkness, there is no light, there is only Lasagne!

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    Beep and Dash and Hyphen you.

    I'm a thief
    I'm a thief
    I am a rotting cheating thief.

    But when I see this on your site
    you're a rotten thiever too.
    You're a shoe
    you're a gnat
    You're a a
    Plagiarising BOOO

    Beep and dash and Hyphen too
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    Is there a story behind this that you're not telling us?

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    Yeah it feels like you have some sort of beef with someone...
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    Quote Originally Posted by Nightshade View Post
    I'm a thief
    I'm a thief
    I am a rotting cheating thief.

    But when I see this on your site
    you're a rotten thiever too.
    You're a shoe
    you're a gnat
    You're a a
    Plagiarising BOOO

    Beep and dash and Hyphen too
    Whomever this was addressed to, you've sure fixed his or her clock! "Beep and dash and Hyphen too" - you really don't pull your punches, do you?

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    I liked this very much, but I don't want to make you angry with me....
    I hope death is joyful, and I hope I'll never return -Frida Khalo

    If I seem insensitive to what you are going through, understand it's the way I am- Mr. Spock

    Personally, I think that the unique and supreme delight lies in the certainty of doing 'evil'–and men and women know from birth that all pleasure lies in evil. - Baudelaire

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    heh,
    Thankyou all
    This poem has now served its purpose so I will merge it with the rest of my poems.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    This poem has now served its purpose
    No it hasn't! You haven't told us exactly what it's about / who it's aimed at!

    C'mon, give us a clue, you shady little tease...

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    NO one really, general plagiarists.
    I follow an online novel that got pulled on Sunday following 7 counts of serious plagiarism ( someone decided they could self publish it on lulu for one ) so I am annoyed at that-
    and other things.
    Also I was proving a point to someone.

    and I hate to disappoint but I wrote it in less than a minute off the top of my head, ( see previous page for comment about unblocking my brain and poems beginning to pour out of every which where. Ok so there are specific reference that would mean specific things to certain people but I am not going into that.

    and Beep and dash and Hyphen too well I actually swear like that in RL not infrequently. Although I also like the words Astrix Hyperbole and colon- semi colon .
    Last edited by Nightshade; 05-27-2009 at 07:15 PM.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    "The time has come," the Walrus said,"To talk of many things:

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    Ok, fair enough. That's good enough for me.

    And well done on not swearing. I go through phases of thinking I should stop / cut down on expletives, but if never fking works...

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    Message from a dream

    as usal having issues with the puctuation and Im not completly happy with the ending so suggestions?
    I might change the title to Isis song but maybe not.
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    Last night I dreamed
    I saw you dead
    And buried far away
    The dark earth wrapped
    You cold and hard-
    hid you from my gaze.

    Far and wide
    I crossed the earth
    And searched
    both high and low
    But nevermore
    I saw your face
    And living tears flow

    So though I hope
    the dream’s untrue
    I really wish you’d write
    and tell me how
    You do.
    Last edited by Nightshade; 07-27-2009 at 06:29 PM.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    Fatal Insomnia

    More of the morbid darkness...
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    Fatal insomnia

    I can’t close my eyes! Its scary!
    There I am alone
    Cocooned in the dark
    With the voices in my head
    No one to hear me scream
    So I glued my eyes open and
    Blinded my self staring at the light
    But I couldn’t sleep
    And the delusions grew
    Paradoxically I strove for Oblivion-
    I died.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    "The time has come," the Walrus said,"To talk of many things:

    Forum Rules- You know you want to read 'em

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