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    Talking My second Poem!

    The second one I have decided to post is a simple Epitaph that you would see on a Disney tomb stone or something. It doesn't matter I guess since I had fun writing it. The inspiration came when I was watching Dracula on TV; it was the really bad one. It doesn't have a title.


    Here lies Janise a graceful woman,

    Who loved with all she had,

    Gave with all she had,

    Accepted all she got,

    and still got shot.

    So there it is, I'm sorry if it offend's anyone ahead of time, that was not the idea behind it.

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    I'm considered one with a morbid sense of humor, but that last line almost made me wet myself! Well done. I like poems with a surprise ending like that.

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    LMAO!! Yeah well I did say that it should go on a tomb!!! Maybe not on Disney's though! It might scare the kids!

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    Nah, it could be one of Disney's disguised doodads . . . what the heck are those called? No worries if you don't know what I'm talking about.

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    Yeah....Um...No idea! Sorry!

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    No worries. It was a little out there!

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    Brevity, as it is said, is the soul of wit, and the way this raced to the unexpected ending was witty indeed!

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    Thank you!

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    That was really witty. Yes, that was a real killer line. (Here's the part where you groan! )
    I've been reading Richard Brautigan 'Trout Fishing in America' and he wrote a few funny epitaphs too. Unfortunately can't remember which chapter they were in. Oh well. Thanks for the poem!

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