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    Suzerain of Cost&Caution SleepyWitch's Avatar
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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
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    Sleepy, your poem I enjoyed -- I liked that touch of German in it. And the resolve of the person that would not be ringing the other -- I liked the way the lines read.
    thanks kiz but does it also become clear that the reasons for not ringing have changed?

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    Riesa, I enjoyed your poem, and in particular the phrases Very beautiful.

    Sleepy, your poem I enjoyed -- I liked that touch of German in it. And the resolve of the person that would not be ringing the other -- I liked the way the lines read.

    Silas, your title was awesome -- loved it! This was a very cool passage, I liked it a lot.


    Kiz, thanks so much for reading these. I sincerely hope that one day I will come to this thread a see that you have posted a wierd poem of your own, come on, pleeeeaaaaassssee? give it a whirl?
    "Don't matter who they are, anybody sets foot in this house, they are company and don't let me catch you remarking on their ways like you were so high and mighty."

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    Quote Originally Posted by SleepyWitch View Post
    thanks kiz but does it also become clear that the reasons for not ringing have changed?
    Well I took it that the person in the poem has discovered a cheater after all, so I would say that the reasons for not ringing changed at the end.

    Quote Originally Posted by Riesa View Post
    Kiz, thanks so much for reading these. I sincerely hope that one day I will come to this thread a see that you have posted a wierd poem of your own, come on, pleeeeaaaaassssee? give it a whirl?
    I absolutely LOVE reading what everyone posts, and they say that if one reads good stuff, there is a better chance of one writing good stuff. I don't feel that I'm there yet ...

    I have a few things that I struggle with in writing poetry, and I am foolishly shy about it, je suppose. When I read my 'stuff', I think of Hallmark Cards for gawsh sakes...

    Oh well, there is still the Haiku threads...

    Thanks, Riesa, for your encouragement, and you keep up the awesome work.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Liberal Appeal


    Pulsating through the bodies
    of the has-beens and the hotties,
    a new inarguable creed.
    The by-product of greed,
    the great and gruesome classes,
    who can't clean up their gasses,
    look on in massive scorn.
    The ripple sect suborn
    unwritten rule supporting
    lewd celebrities cavorting
    in blatant flattery
    of a greasy battery
    of presumptive fiscal soldiers,
    propping the ratings games of Folgers.
    and their modesty-snubbing siblings
    fishing through the purse strings
    of the teetotalling, unaddicted,
    disaffected, undepicted,
    disenfranchised, underrated,
    unqualified and separated,
    afflicted souls of the free base
    of the selected core of constitutional case
    the lucky, the proud, the old and the young
    the root of the matter, the restive unsung.
    "It is not the rich man you should properly call happy, but him who knows with wisdom how to use the blessings of the gods, to endure hard poverty, and who fears dishonor worse than death, and is not afraid to die for cherished friends or fatherland."

    - Horace

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    Bullykins, madder, dely, mould, trough, swede of the folio, mathching socks decision time,
    It's not a little detiny for gulping and clipping weeks of revenge fantasy and lying authoritarians.
    But, y'know, sometimes Wellwyn vacuole or repeat meeting molting coat of marketry pointing
    Will then eventually if tenuously leading no more from fast and round appreciate or coo
    Calculated alike not for repeating or Mary who went there alone and not without her tutu
    said Hi and loved the wind the rushing reeds and marsh flowers humming with buzzing
    life of all kinds the rinklets of speciating look now coloured prettily likening to living on chuckles
    keeping their ideas there and liking all the opposing factors and the wildness of loading cots
    or cutting cheese in spite of the pollen, your hayfever, the domestic violence, the tornness
    of your jeans. Oh well. At least [counts off only the beginning of long list of quotidian blessings]
    And it's precisely to stop the stepping pedaco of chattles snood elegant mild row house
    of powder blue, lemon yellow shutters, wide, uterine sky, cells wheeling, specks of what
    what

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    lode smith



    To each his own,
    Light yield,
    Thrown scantily
    Fur afield,
    Narry so frigid,
    Robust as gaunt,
    The bust in theatre.
    Drum, atnosphere's haunt!
    The flame does stay,
    The tear dries at the root,
    The fire arrays
    A primal likeness of soot.
    The ideals fail,
    The fever fades.
    The station shifts -
    The palazzo shades.
    And the molten mass,
    A puzzled deck of glass
    Gleams in glossy strand
    From some neighbouring land.
    "It is not the rich man you should properly call happy, but him who knows with wisdom how to use the blessings of the gods, to endure hard poverty, and who fears dishonor worse than death, and is not afraid to die for cherished friends or fatherland."

    - Horace

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    Word Endings

    Code:
    This was the decree: 
    
    no clichés
    
    and of the words   gather them
    two <x> two   into the synta
    
    declamation         forty <x> forty  twelve <x> twelve
    the   drowning   of   the    symbol<s>
    
    they accrued in the banter from currents 
    
    <x> marked the spot    synta rested there
    
    they departed two <x> two
    
    from the banter   into the impeccable field 
    count them         the sounds of the consummate 
    
    in absentia:  
       no wing song
             phases of reflection silenced
                    censored    the changing of the territories
                                    soundless the torrents of atmosphere will fall
    
    (mark them all <n> <v> <a> <p>)
    
    sanguineness extinguished
    
    no clichés 
    
    
    a man is speaking in his head
    as if to write
    
    the season of turning
                                 through the window
    
    outside     in the branches     sawing of the year
    
    of her eyes    he writes     
                 of her
    tucked bare legs on couches
    
    in him    his chest   like before a rain    a front 
                
                     (passing through)
    
    how she reaches on toes for kissing     calves flexing 
    
    her finger now   polish (Sanguineness Gloss)
    in a  coffee cup handle
    
    glass in between them  (glass)  and the sawing    the breaking free of  
    
    branches 
    
    she list–ens   leg out under the table   toes   how she does this
    
    he stutters   remembering  vaguely    the lost words for these things

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    This is so good, I almost don't mind that the reasoning is so precisely opposed to my view.

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    Rent Mosaic

    Erroneous glitch,
    felonious switch
    stitched along
    summa resinous pitch;
    it breaches the mind -
    trestles that bind -
    finds the esoteric in signed
    collected clocks that rewind.
    A fault lies within
    the most precious violin,
    invading as a pretense,
    a modelled figured sequin.
    But the tone is the richer
    for the internecine flaw hitcher
    which her timbre vibrates nicely
    and her solos so lovely feature.



    Expeditious Vaunt

    Cancelled sequence
    In incontrovertible aspect,
    Respective tense
    Of philosophical dialect,
    Having brought back from yore
    The humanistic dialogue,
    Language of more
    Of sensationalized pedagogue.
    How then to retain
    The fruitful encounter
    Of sound and the sane
    In a determinate, yonder
    And herein, a state
    Of quasilude enhances
    A dimensional date
    For delayed second chances,
    When true fate shuffles out
    On a risque beat,
    Ushering in little doubt
    Of encroaching feat.
    Last edited by alakungfu; 02-17-2009 at 04:34 PM.
    "It is not the rich man you should properly call happy, but him who knows with wisdom how to use the blessings of the gods, to endure hard poverty, and who fears dishonor worse than death, and is not afraid to die for cherished friends or fatherland."

    - Horace

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    An edible clairvoyance disintegrates
    as absence flutters like a silken heart
    over our skin, an anchored doctor
    schooled in loops, trireme tangles and the stone-
    combusted net of disorder, flowers
    nestled in the final lap of lost seeds.
    and somehow a dog
    has taken itself & its tail considerably away
    into the mountains or sea or sky, leaving
    behind: me, wag.
    - John Berryman

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    Narrow, straight
    left, right
    curved, unbalanced
    inverted, untouched
    discover, reveal
    is it enough
    or is it too much.
    Love doesn't make the world go round,
    love is what makes the ride worthwhile.

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    N3Rd2 r3J01C3

    r3J01C3 y3 n3rd2!
    4Nd 48h0r 73H H3Rd2
    7H023 DUm8 4Nd D3N23
    @ 7H31R 0WN 3Xp3N23.
    R3j01C3 y3 n3rD2!
    4ND d37357 73H h3Rd2
    7h023 m1ndL355 c0w2
    W17 7h31R wh02, wH472, 4nd H0W2.
    R3j01C3!

    com-pas-sion (n.) [ME. & OFr. <LL. (Ec.) compassio, sympathy < compassus, pp. of compati, to feel pity < L. com-, together + pali, to suffer] sorrow for the sufferings or trouble of another or others, accompanied by an urge to help; deep sympathy; pity

    Dostoevsky Forum!

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    Pallgrave reverberates matchlessly, fawning over an inviolable mink.
    End this now, Atom Man, he cries out, gathering his powers about him like a
    power glove.
    At once, Harem Man and his conclave of super-powered concubines
    sally forth from the bathhouse, hurling blasts of enzyme nutrient vapour
    in concentrated form.
    End? says Atom Man, unruffled, brushing the dust of a decimated city from his cruel lapel,
    these trifles are a mere diversion. Look here, beyond this Mayan veil, observe the nucleotide, the contradictions of the quanta, here, in the always divergent centre,
    is the joke you do not seek. But it seeks
    you.

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    Primate, my pet
    given PG Tips and biscuits
    a fine-toothed coat, suited ape
    smile pretty for the camera!
    Chimp, some jungle! Urban
    man chump, fumbling
    for cashbox keys bundled
    on borderless journeys, chloroformed shrieks
    pricetagged and painless.
    Play, Bananaboy, play!
    No, not on the
    just polished coffee-table, Chimpsky!
    Follow Simeon's house rules,
    no climbing on the curtains,
    don't play with the phone
    or we'll send the cleaners clockwork like
    to take you out tendered, treedweller!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dori View Post
    N3Rd2 r3J01C3

    r3J01C3 y3 n3rd2!
    4Nd 48h0r 73H H3Rd2
    7H023 DUm8 4Nd D3N23
    @ 7H31R 0WN 3Xp3N23.
    R3j01C3 y3 n3rD2!
    4ND d37357 73H h3Rd2
    7h023 m1ndL355 c0w2
    W17 7h31R wh02, wH472, 4nd H0W2.
    R3j01C3!

    This is choice! Choice I say. 4817 3NcR1P72huN. Maybe more.

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